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6Books of the Mythos22
Unaussprechlichen Kulten' needs to be 'Von unaussprechlichen Kulten' in German. Being a German speaker this always makes my skin crawl as this is very often not correctly used in mythos literature. When leaving out the 'Von' the remainder needs to be 'Unaussprechliche Kulte' (so two times without the 'n' at the end for the dative form), but this would not be the complete title.
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2The Mythos Player-Character Races1"Next come the gnorri: amphibious entities with little understanding of the surface world who the nevertheless wish to participate in it." extra 'the' in this section
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1Three basic rules of Horror3"His rules apply to any type of horror however, and I consciously..." should be "His rules apply to any type of horror, however, and I consciously..."
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How to use Horror in a RPG environment
5"This goes on and on: just as when an onion is peeled, successive strata appear." - a colon is not necessary. Better would be "This goes on and on, just as when an onion is peeled, successive strata appear."
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5"...odd fossils, excellently preserved, and reminiscent of the ancient tales of the Old Ones." - extraneous comma. "...odd fossils, excellently preserved and reminiscent of the ancient tales of the Old Ones.
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6"Now the ghouls lay traps, and call unholy allies to their aid." - extraneous comma. "Now the ghouls lay traps and call unholy allies to their aid."
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2[Zoog] Physiology
28"frightened involuntary squeal),bBut they" should be "frightened involuntary squeal), but they"
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2Ghoul Traits24
"Ghouls have remarkable fortitude . . . and while they augment their own significant capacity for intellect with the ability to absorb fragments of memory and thought from those they feed upon." The 'while' in this section means there should be an additional clause at the end of the sentence. Removing the 'while' would also fix the grammar here.
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2[Gnorri] relations14
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2Other Types of Cats Sidebar8
"Two extraterrestrial species of cats are well documented, as well as a newly-recorded species (Martian cats)." makes no sense. Maybe "There are two well documented extraterrestrial species of cats, as well as a newly-recorded species (Martian cats).
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3Third Eye Masterpiece7Prerequesites: Craft (Painting) 9 ranks or Perform (act or dance) 9 ranks
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5Spell Lists 36Call Father Yog-Sothoth is not highlighted like the other spells.
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7[Flying Polyp] Ecology46"With their polyps, gestalt nature, the various...." I'm not sure what this sentence was meant to be; perhaps it should be "With their polypous, gestalt nature...", or "With their polyps' gestalt nature..."?
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7The Black Man6"...an ordinary human with eyes, teeth, and nails of blackest pitch..." might have been intended to be "an ordinary human with skin, eyes, teeth, and nails of blackest pitch"
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8Abhoth - Filth6Does not mention what masquerade does, nor list it as an ability. The Filth stat bock appears to cut off, and stops at #5 of Specialized Anatomy.
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9Colour Out of Space14No Stat Block for the Colour Out of SpaceThat is intentional; you cannot "fight" the Colour out of Space
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9Moonbeast66
A cluster of pink, worm-like sensory tendrils writhes from the nose of this hefty, eyeless, gray toad-like being, tasting the air with tiny sucking sounds. An unnatural scent invades your nostrils as the wriggling of the cluster of pink worm-like sensory tendrils on its face makes you queasy. Reword second repetitious description with "...nostrils as the blasphemous writhings of it's face makes you queasy." 
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9Moonbeast66“Gray-white slipper things which could expand..." should be "Gray-white slippery things which could expand..."  
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9The Great Race of the Past111"They preferred tools, however, are technological." should be "Their preferred tools, however, are technological."
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9Daughter of Shub-Niggurath88There should be a space between the monster name and the challenge rating.
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5Spell Description18-19
For the spell Mist of R'lyeh, the spell description says "Duration 1 round" and that it lasts "until the end of your next turn" but on the spell lists section (under every class) it reads that the spell lasts for 3 rounds + 1 round/level. The duration time is inconsistant and confusing.
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5Spell Description18In the spell discription of Mist of R'lyeh, Glamour is misspelled as "glamer"
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