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Rock and Roll Radio
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Our opening act. The pirate radio host Regulus quickly finds herself in hot water.
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ActionTriggerCharacterOriginal TextEdited TextWord CountNotes
Designer Notes
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Begin Game for the first timeVertinIt's rainingIt's raining
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No,No,
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it is notIt's not rainClarity
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It's the "Storm"It's the "Storm"
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The "Storm" is comingThe "Storm" is coming
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RegulusAha... are you feeling, seasick?Aha... are you feeling, seasick?
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Open your eyes, followersOpen your eyes, followers
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It's 12 at noon and the rocking APPLe is welcoming the most unwelcome of visitorsIt's 12 at noon and the rocking APPLe is welcoming the most unwelcome of visitors
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I'll hold of you a public hearingI'm holding a public hearingWording
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You stalkers, stalking me "the Pirate" for days.You stalkers have been stalking me "the Pirate" for days.Grammar
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Get ready to be shocked away by the rock'n'rolling coasters night and day!Well, get ready to be shocked away by the rock'n'rolling coasters night and day!Better cadence for vocal dialogue
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Now, listen to Radio APPLe. Come with me! Let's count down to ecstasy!Now, listen to Radio APPLe. Count with me! Let's count down to ecstasy!Adding a bit of repetition to give it some pizzaz
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Say your names, you British government stooges!Say your names, you British government stooges!
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Say your names, you Manus Vindictae robbers!Say your names, you Manus Vindictae robbers!
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You banned music?You banned music?
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You robbed traders?You robbed traders?
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Our lips were sealed and we wanderedYou tried to seal our lips and push us awayMore targeted accusation against the 'government'
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but nothing gonna changebut nothing gonna change
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our love for freedom ever!our love for freedom ever!
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Exposion
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RegulusWhat's wrong?! What's happened?What's wrong?! What's happened?
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APPLeThere is a huge black ship behind us. We're under attack!There is a huge black ship behind us. We're under attack!
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Bloody hell! Turn off the microphone!Bloody hell! Turn off the microphone!
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A bridge... cannons with veins ... what the hell is that?!A bridge... cannons with veins ... what the hell is that?!
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You gotta be kidding! I just played a song?!You gotta be kidding! All I did was play some songs!I'm not sure if we're implying she's been doing the pirate radio thing for a while
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APPLeCaptain, it's the icon of the Manus VindictaeCaptain, there. That's the symbol of the Manus VindictaeSymbol is the more appropraite word here.
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NarratorThe wind is wuthering.. The wind is howling.. I'm not sure if 'wuthering' is a word used often in this time period. But it feels out of place with the narrator saying it.
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RegulusManus Vindictae? Those terrorists?Manus Vindictae? The terrorists?
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Is it because of my "little thing"? Or... Is it because of my "little thing"? Or...
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I get it... I get it...
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Return to shipRegulusYour accomplices are here!Your accomplices are here!
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Remember, you are still captives of this Pirate! Get them to hold their fire immediately, otherwise... Remember, you are still captives of this Pirate! Get them to hold their fire immediately, otherwise...
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NarratorAnother bomb hits the ship. The smell of gunpowder and sparks soon fill the air. Another bomb hits the ship. The smell of gunpowder and sparks soon fill the air.
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Regulus*coughs**coughs*
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APPLeWe're sinking. Please be ready to abandon the ship, my captain.We're sinking. Captain, please be ready to abandon the ship.Word order
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RegulusWhoa...Ooohhh...Whoa is more amazement. I feel like Regulus is more stressed, so I think 'Oh' fits better
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NarratorShe scrambles to dispel the mute incantation on the captives.The girl scrambles to dispel the mute incantation on the captives.
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RegulusHey! Hey hey! I can hand you over... just please don't break my ship!Hey! Hey hey! I'll hand you over... just please don't break my ship!Grammar
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My records are my treasures... No violence!My records are my treasures... No violence!
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Say something if you can hear me. Hey!Say something if you can hear me. Hey!
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Male Investigator*coughs**coughs*
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Female Investigator*coughs**coughs*
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*coughs* ... We don't know them. We've tried to tell you. *coughs* ... We're not with them. We've tried to tell you. The Foundation knows who the Manus are, so this wording is more clear.
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Male InvestigatorWe're investigators from the Foundation.We're investigators from the Foundation.
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Female InvestigatorYou got the wrong people.You got the wrong people.
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RegulusAhh ...Ahh ...
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Protect the records!!Protect the records!!
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