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Your storyYour topicYour tentative thesisYour source (copy the reference entry) and an explanation of how you think you will use it (support, disagreement, context, etc.)Dr. X's initial feedback
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4/2/2016 13:52:47cempasuchil_86AmnestyNoah embraces her power to communicate with humans and the alien communities in order to survive and create a new way of living where humans and aliens can live in peace.In "Amnesty," Octavia E. Butler explores the human need for power and the inability to embrace change and superiority of an alien race.I’m planning to use Diversity, change, violence: Octavia Butler's pedagogical philosophy article by Sarah Outterson, for context to illustrate the use of violence as means of superiority and control. Outterson, Sarah. "Diversity, change, violence: Octavia Butler's pedagogical philosophy." Utopian Studies 19.3 (2008): 433+. Literature Resource Center. Web. 2 Apr. 2016.

I’m planning to use Theorizing Fear: Octavia Butler and the Realist Utopia by Claire P.Curties to explore the idea of fear as motivation to overthrow the alien communities even thought they mean no harm.
The sources look good. The thesis needs rephrasing--STAT
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4/3/2016 23:10:34look into my eyeAmnestyWhy Noah favors more the Aliens than the Humans.The story "Amnesty" represents how humans governed and tutored but the Aliens seems to be the good ones. Living with the Other in "Bloodchild" & "Amnesty": I'll talk about how humans treated noah and the aliens too.The idea seems good, but both the thesis needs work AND we need more information about this source you have barely mentioned here
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4/4/2016 0:21:40OhhhRenneRAmnestyHow does having been captive to both cultures give Noah power over both? Power is one of the main themes of the story. Whoever have the power have control of domination.In the story "Amnesty," Butler proposes that humans only know greed, and always seek to domineer others.Curtis, Claire P. “Theorizing Fear: Octavia Butler and the Realist Utopia”. Utopian Studies 19.3 (2008): 411–431. Which will show why the humans choose to dominate out of fear.Source seems good, though you could have explained it more (do so in the Annotated Bibliography), but how is the topic question answered by the tentative thesis? I am not sure you know what your topic is yet.
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4/4/2016 8:59:15Korny247AmnestyFear as a roadmarker for lifeNoah is a translator for the Communities but are her decisions based on fear of what happened to her happening again? And who is she more afraid of ? The Communities or the Humanshttp://web.a.ebscohost.com.rpa.laguardia.edu:2048/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=2&sid=1dc4e2b6-e9f7-4fb0-a1d2-f83879305689%40sessionmgr4002&hid=4114 This will lend some support and maybe context for this thesis.1. Questions are not theses.

2. I'm not looking up the source--that's your job. Plus your explanation of it is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you.
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4/4/2016 5:57:00Figueroa LeaAmnesty My topic for Amnesty is despite humanity’s discontentment with the communities taking over the desert lands and potentially threatening their dominance over earth, man can and must learn to overcome their pride. People are often so enveloped by the fear of the unknown that rather than taking the time to learn about the circumstances at hand, our initial actions are to destroy. Noah the protagonist in Amnesty shows that while we don’t always have control over the problems we face, there is always a way to influence our situation. Having faced abuse from both the communities and humans, Noah’s ultimate goal is to establish a union between both species that would allow us to prosper off one another rather than destroy ourselves and something we never took the time to understand. "Amnesty” is a depiction of how the human need for dominance overpowers our ability to accept and prosper with change.Curtis, Claire P. “Theorizing Fear: Octavia Butler and the Realist Utopia”. Utopian Studies 19.3 (2008): 411–431.

I chose this secondary source for Amnesty because it discusses fear which is both a natural and rather overwhelming feeling. While questioning what fear really is it enabled me to see how much Butler characterizes this feeling into human interaction. We do things simply out of fear, whether it’s fear for others, fear for ourselves, fear of the unknown or more importantly fear of the known. In Amnesty people are so afraid of the communities simply because they know nothing of who they are, how they function, or what their intentions are. It is because of their fear that they turn to destruction rather than collaboration. Humans are quick not only in their eagerness to destroy the communities but in their ability to easily harm one another. In addition to that this article also helps me to gain a better understanding of Butler’s take from Noah’s perspective which relates to my topic that man must take the time to look into those fears and learn. Rather than blaming the aliens who are simply misunderstood, we might just learn that the real problems lay within ourselves and the fear we feed into.
Topic is more a summary than a topic. The thesis is okay. Source is also.
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4/3/2016 21:45:01Jp_writer347Blood Child Species InterconnectionIn the short story "Bloodchild", Octavia Butler exposes the idea of love and relationship between two different species which are the Tlic and the Terrans.Helford, Elyce Rae. "'Would You Really Rather Die than Bear My Young?': The Construction of Gender, Race, and Species in Octavia E. Butler's 'Bloodchild'." African American Review 28.2 (1994): 259-71. This source will support my thesis.Thesis needs work. Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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4/4/2016 2:55:54StudentSO8BloodChildInterdependence of species (alien)(human)"BloodChild" is a short story that represents Interdependence of difference species. Bloodchild. (1999). In T. Akers (Ed.), Short Stories for Students (Vol. 6, pp. 23-37). Detroit: Gale. Retrieved from http://go.galegroup.com.rpa.laguardia.edu:2048/ps/i.do?id=GALE%7CCX2695300013&v=2.1&u=cuny_laguardia&it=r&p=GLS&sw=w&asid=a1af3e95d846aae83f9e98e9a04792c4 ( APA Citation ) the citation machine on the Lag cc didnt not provide me with the citation you asked for. ( I find this whole entire article to have provided me with the necessary information to write about the short story "BloodChild")The thesis could use refinement. There are many types of interdependence. Please find the exact type you think this relationship is.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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4/4/2016 1:40:13PurpleYayaBloodchildGroup RelationsBloodchild symbolizes a slave system. Weinbaum, Alys Eve. "The Afterlife of Slavery and the Problem of Reproductive Freedom." Social Text 31.2 [115] (2013): 49-68.

I agree with this source because I believe that the true meaning behind Bloodchild is slavery.
Both the thesis and the explanation need work. What about this paper tells you that your hypothesis is correct, even when Octavia Butler herself is telling you that you are not in the afterword?
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4/4/2016 8:14:10RMANEKSpeech SoundsLanguage is what makes humanity humane.In "Speech Sounds", Butler depicts how language is what makes humanity humane.https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B8aXmlMKumqIbHM2TXBfWFZwOWc/view For this topic I will extend an argument that the author has already made. Language does make society more “human” because essentially it is an important aspect of an individuals daily life. Butler illustrates a world where a disappearance of language has demonstrate negative consequences on society. The tremendous gap between those with the power of literacy and those without, creates a unhealthy division leading individuals to live in constant fear. With the loss of language our society as we know it will become less “humane” because without the tool of communication, humans will be doomed to exist.

The article "Stylistic Techniques and Ethical Staging in Octavia Butler's 'Speech Sounds’” by Sandrine Sorlin, I will use the article to extend the argument that language is what makes individuals and human society more “human”. Drawing out key ideas such as how human nature and the role of language in our construction as human ethical beings.
The topic/thesis seems okay. Can you explain more how the sources support your thesis?
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3/31/2016 21:08:19Inspirational BeautySpeech SoundsLanguage and humanity.In "Speech Sounds", Butler depicts how language is what makes humanity humane.Troy, Maria Holmgren. "Loss of Words: Octavia Butler's 'Speech Sounds'." The Power of Words. Ed. Solveig Granath, June Miliander, and Elizabeth Wennö. Karlstad, Sweden: Karlstads Universitet, 2005. 73-80. I will be using this source in support of my thesis to show how a loss of words creates a non-humane society because words are powerful.Topic/thesis seems okay. Can you explain more how the sources support your thesis?
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4/3/2016 19:32:30gymlifespeech soundsWould you say that language is what makes individual humans and human society "human"? How so? Why/How does the loss of language make us "alien" to each other in this story? Does this loss also make us less "humane"? This short story emphasizes how powerful literacy truly isTroy, Maria Holmgren. "Loss of Words: Octavia Butler's 'Speech Sounds'." The Power of Words. Ed. Solveig Granath, June Miliander, and Elizabeth Wennö. Karlstad, Sweden: Karlstads Universitet, 2005. 73-80. I will agree with this context because it supports my thesis about the story about demonstrating how powerful literacy is because without it there would be a lot of misunderstandings which this source agree's withTopic/thesis okay. So is source
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4/4/2016 7:34:52afphia148Speech SoundsImportance of LanguageIn the short story Speech Sounds by Octavia Butler she shows the significance that language holds within a community. Sorlin, Sandrine. "Stylistic Techniques and Ethical Staging in Octavia Butler's 'Speech Sounds'." The Ethics and Poetics of Alterity: New Perspectives on Genre Literature. Ed. Maylis Rospide and Sandrine Sorlin. Newcastle upon Tyne, England: Cambridge Scholars, 2015. 82-94. This source will provide context as well as support for my thesis.Thesis could be rephrased a bit.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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3/28/2016 15:33:40jafar.majeedulThe book of marthatitleOctavia Butler purpose was to start controversy among religious beliefs. I disagree with Butler's title. i will try to find sources of people who claimed there is another book. like the Catholic religion?? I do not understand the thesis. There is no mention of a source
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4/3/2016 19:28:47ramdresThe Book of Marthabeliefs. Everything happens for a reason. ???
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4/4/2016 0:08:35angrykakapoThe book of MarthaButler's realist approach to Martha's "personal utopia"In "The book of Martha" Butler shares her realist vision, that fear is a necessary passion for humans to bring about change. Curtis, Claire P. “Theorizing Fear: Octavia Butler and the Realist Utopia”. Utopian Studies 19.3 (2008). I plan to use this reference/book to support my thesis, as the author describes Butler as a realist. All okay. Be a bit more generous with your explanation of the source in the Annotated Bibliography
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4/4/2016 0:23:21Nikita KhanThe book of MarthaIt take's darkness to see the lightIt takes darkness to see the light, meaning without life stuggles and difficulties to see yourself at it's full potential and strength.Octavia Butler (1947-) by Lisbeth Gant- Britton. I will be using this source at my secondary source to support my thesis.I am confused by what you thesis means and how it relates to the story.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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4/4/2016 0:43:53blazingm0on1111The Book of MarthaBeing a god our self The Book of Martha Butler indicates that we have the capability of being your own godGericke, Jaco W. "What Is It like to Be a God? A Philosophical Clarification of Instances of Divine Suffering in the Psalter.(Original Research)." Verbum Et Ecclesia 33.1 (2012): Verbum Et Ecclesia, Jan, 2012, Vol.33(1). Web. I agree with this article because it explain if we were gods what kind of mistakes we would make and how we would take the power for granted Interesting. I look forward to reading this argument.
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4/1/2016 20:32:46Sallyyim16The Evening and the Morning and the NightHow does suffering Duryea-Gode Disease also double as having special abilities? In the story The Evening and the Morning and the Night Butler purposes that there is ways we can help people control themselves from their DGD disease by not hurting themselves and the other people in the society.Hammer, Everett. "Determined Agency: A Postsecular Proposal for Religion and Literature-and Science." Religion and Literature 41.3 (2009): 91-98. I think i will use it to support and as a context in my paper as evidence to support my thesis.You thesis a) does not really answer the question, but rather b) summarizes the story.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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4/4/2016 4:27:08Leah102The Evening and the Morning and the NightSegregation through the abuse of power.In "The Evening and the Morning and the Night", Butler uses the disease DGD and how it is handled in the context of the story as commentary on segregation in society, abuse of power and the suffering that people go through because of it.https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wzupy_pKEqQTx9nUrmitEGQ1Nvi7TTsB2hC7FIEWynQ/edit?pref=2&pli=1 This source supports my thesis because it states how society has been effected by people who abuse power which led to the segregation of thus society based on race, gender, medical history, religion, etcThe idea behind the thesis looks fine, but the thesis could use rephrasing.

I'm not looking up your source: that's your job.
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4/4/2016 4:19:10KeyboredpleaseThe Evening, and the Morning and the NightSuffering Duryea-Gode Disease also doubles as having special abilites.In "The Evening, and the Morning and the Night," Butler suggests that genetic disorders are what teach individuals who they really are..Bast, Florian. “I Hugged Myself”: First-Person Narration as an Agential Act in Octavia Butler’s “The Evening and the Morning and the Night.” Black Intersectionalities: A Critique for the 21st Century. Published in print: 2014 Published Online: May 2014 ISBN: 9781846319389 eISBN: 9781781380901

(Will use this source as a support to my thesis, explaining the "we versus they" viewpoint presented in said article. Like many superheroes, the DGD disease presents a gift/curse theme that could tie into segregation/isolation... an issue superheroes also had to go through.)
Interesting. The X-Men paper. The thesis is meh, though...
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4/3/2016 16:43:01Barcode158376The evening, The morning, and the NightIn what ways is this story about being trapped by one's body? About being trapped by society? For DGD sufferers, is moving from the general healthcare system to Dilg communities a form of liberation or another form of entrapment? The story explains how Lynn character is Labeled in society for having the DGD disease, how being trapped in a one's body is something people have no choice being born with. As people born with certain skin color, or diseases and having society label them and not giving people the choice to try to live a normal life. I feel as moving the DGD sufferers into their communities is a form of isolation and actually ignoring the real problem of the disease. Just a form of finding the easy way out for those people who suffer from the DGD disease.Bast, Florian. “I Hugged Myself”: First-Person Narration as an Agential Act in Octavia Butler’s “The Evening and the Morning and the Night.” Black Intersectionalities: A Critique for the 21st Century. Published in print: 2014 Published Online: May 2014 ISBN: 9781846319389 eISBN: 9781781380901== I am going to support this source by supporting its topic by extending an argument that someone has already made. i will explain my part in the topic as well as my ideas that correlate with the story and my source. The ideas are quite good, but you really do not have a clear thesis yet.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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4/4/2016 1:07:22AprilGreeenThe Evening, The Morning, And the NightDGD being a curse or a giftButler proposes that a disease can be both a curse and a gift.https://drive.google.com/folderview?id=0B_Egjt-4g-yZV3Zodkc1U2U3TGc&usp=sharing ; using this as supportI'm not looking up your source: that's your job.

Your explanation of the source is unavaling. You need to explain more as to HOW the source will help you. What is it about?
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