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2/22/2016 12:46:27HartJacob Animals do not need a Bill of Rights as the Federal Government should be more concerned with their constituents and only act within the parameters of the Constitution.Jacob, argue preventing a bill of rights would do in your opinion. You can accomplish this by including an academic verb.
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2/22/2016 12:49:57HaroDianeAnimal bill of rights should be set because it could possibly establish regulations for the better treatment of animals by aquariums and zoos. Inacating a bill of rights would...
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2/22/2016 12:51:30ToolsonAnneliseAnimals should not have a Bill of Rights similar to that of humans because animals often lack certain mental and spiritual qualities that humans possess, therefore justifying the use of animals as a resource for humans.Because it would encourage...??? Is encourage the verb that would work for you?
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2/22/2016 12:54:04Hanson RachelMore often times than not, an “Animal Bill of Rights” would be less effective than if humans had more laws and regulations of what they can do with wild animals.What would having a bill of rights do? Describe with a verb. In your opininon why would it be less effective?
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2/22/2016 12:54:33MioneMariaIn most cases, an extensive bill of rights would progressively deteriorate our ability to maintain and further the development of the human race. Good
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2/22/2016 12:56:28LimBradyThe implementation of an animal Bill of Rights similar to that of American citizens would, most likely, create more problems than it would solve and would inconvenience far more people than it would satisfy.Okay
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2/22/2016 12:59:33StewartJoeyWhile some might disagree, an animal bill of rights would impede on the research of them and would further cause both social and economic issues in our society.Good
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2/22/2016 13:04:03VuongKelleyAlthough animals and humans share some similarities, a bill of rights for animals is unnecessary and illogical as it would be detrimental to scientific development, the economy, and society’s well being.Good
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2/22/2016 13:04:09DeckerMadisonMost would agree that an increase of rights should be awarded to animals, however giving them a bill of rights would create a great deal of scientific, social and economic problems.Replace "create" with a more academic verb.
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2/22/2016 13:04:28XuCatherineMore often than not, people would agree that an Animal Bill of Rights would establish a strong foundation for the necessary protection of animals from abuse and exploitation.would agree that "establishing a BOR would _____ verb ....
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2/22/2016 13:05:45Clark McKenna
Everyday, countless of innocent animals endure a life of pain, cruelty and isolation because of human’s actions, thus making it necessary to create an Animal Bill of Rights to protect these creatures against the various accounts of abuse they face.
Clarify this thesis. Avoid all of the reasons early on in the thesis. Be clear and to the point.
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2/22/2016 13:07:30BanagaAudreyIt is probable that a Bill of Rights for animals can deteriorate the research opportunities needed to advance not only humans, but many species of animals. Good
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2/22/2016 13:08:01AddisonCharles
It is highly probable that an animal bill of rights would have grave implications for humanity, reducing scientific advancements and reducing humanity’s understanding of the world inside and around itself, as well as humanity’s potential to prosper over nature and influence the world around itself.
This is a bit wordy. How can you condense and clarify?
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2/22/2016 13:09:40YenJared Although the creation of an Animal BIll of Rights would promote fair treatment of animals, the very practicality of such legislation would render it ineffective and unnecessary. Good
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2/22/2016 13:10:27YipMeganThere are some who say that a bill of rights for animals would not be beneficial to animals or humans.Why not? In your opinion, what would it do? Why would it be innefective?
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2/22/2016 13:14:03RoseSteven
Many people would agree that animals deserve better treatment, however giving animals a Bill of Rights would raise many "what if" situations and halt the research necessary to ensure the health of animals in the future.
Delete the "raise many "what if" situations and"
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2/22/2016 13:15:13StoddartNick
Many people believe that animals do not deserve a bill of rights by explaining that it would make it a lot more complicated to get our food, it would be giving animals similar rights as us which is not right, and it could make it so that we would have government officials watching us even more to make sure we are following these rules.
Need to clarify this theses. It is a bit too wordy. Be clear in explaining what it would do.
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2/22/2016 13:16:08MamantaKaedynA Bill of Rights for animals may do more harm than good because as humans, we cannot utilize enforce our own Bill of Rights to ensure the protection of people and most likely will not be able to for animals as well.A BOR will complicate ....
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2/22/2016 13:16:57MulockSamantha Animals are more often than not mistreated by humans, while used in experiments and agricultural purposes, there should be a Bill of Rights protecting the animals so they would make be able to have an improved life.More often than not, a BOR would enhance... Be clear and precise.
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2/22/2016 13:18:55Hanson RachelMore often times than not, an “Animal Bill of Rights” would be less effective than if humans had more laws and regulations of what they can do with wild animals.Why would it be less effective? Make a statement that clearly conveys this idea.
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2/22/2016 13:18:57Hart Jacob
We must prevent the jaded Animal Rights activists from producing and passing an Animal Bill of Rights as the Federal Government should be more concerned with their constituents and governing within the parameters of the Constitution.
How can you write a more precise statement. Avoid overuse of language.
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2/22/2016 13:19:15KaesbauerKayle More often than not, animals deserve rights, and these rights should eradicate the problems with animal abandonment, abuse, and animal experimentation. Get to the point....establishin a bill of rights _____ verb...
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2/22/2016 13:21:43CantrellTalon
Generally, animals of higher intelligence deserve basic rights protecting them from exploitation, cruelty, neglect, and abuse, however, animals should still be allowed to live in captivity as long as it is for the development of science, protection, companionship, or education, and the animals are treated as well as possible given their circumstances.
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2/22/2016 13:22:07FlinnTaylor A bill of rights for sea animals in captivity may be used to diminish irrational behaviors by the animals, and improve their general health, while still allowing us to observe them for academic purposes.
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2/22/2016 13:23:40JangMarianneMost would agree that a Bill of Rights for animals would do more damage for humans and animals by halting research that can greatly benefit them.
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2/22/2016 13:24:52LunaDensie
Countless times the issue of rights for animals has been brought up for their uses in captivity as well as entertainment purposes or medical research will result in a domino effect for both humans and animals that is unbeneficial and unnecessary by interfering economically, socially, and financially although they should be treated with respect and love and not be taken advantage of.
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2/22/2016 13:28:03CanalesMarley
More times than not, animals will be slaughtered without the slightest consideration of their own fear and sadness, but with an Animal Bill of Rights it may call attention to the animals emotions and allow them to be treated equally to humans.
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2/22/2016 13:29:34ToolsonAnneliseAnimals should not have a Bill of Rights because it might hinder the scientific community in research, and upset the current economy.
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2/22/2016 13:29:59MontherNoorhanMany would agree that the creation of a bill of rights for animals would lead to a number of consequences as it could hinder scientific research and would cause drastic change.
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2/22/2016 13:30:53ShibuyaSkylerFor the most part, the conditions that some marine mammals endure due to captivity is not as significant as the benefit that research of these mammals will provide for wild animals.
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2/22/2016 13:31:22NavarroDiegoMost people agree that animal rights is imperative and that animal abuse and neglect is strictly inhuman, that is why it is essential for animals to attain a bill of rights in order to prevent exploitation and abuse.
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2/22/2016 13:32:53MamantaKaedynA Bill of Rights for animals could complicate the current system we live in by potentially making it more difficult to differentiate between basic human and animal rights.
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2/22/2016 13:36:17TedeschiAdamNo government should institute a bill of rights that gives human-like rights to animals; however, the welfare of animals should be protected as long as it doesn’t interfere with essential scientific and human progress.
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2/22/2016 14:28:58CanalesMarley
According to some, animals need a basic bill of rights to protect them of cruel and unnecessary treatment, however an animal bill of rights is inappropriate if it limits humans ability to perform possibly vital research which could help the survival of the human species as a whole.
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2/22/2016 16:58:11ZhouAmanda
Essentially, animals should be protected from exploitation, cruelty, neglect, and abuse to the extent that human progress is not placed above the well-being of animals but also that human progress does not becomes retrogressive.
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2/22/2016 20:08:03GronotteJenniferAccording to some, sea mammals kept in captivity are actually benefiting from research and science information they provide.
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2/22/2016 21:56:29WakilHakeem
I do believe that animals should be treated with respect and care. However, I do not believe that animals should be given a bill of rights because that will treat them like humans and as a result discourage scientific research, which is vital, but also scorn entertainment and close down facilities like SeaWorld which provide care for animals in need.
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2/22/2016 23:55:12WangJerome
Although some animals have similar levels of intelligence to humans, an animal bill of rights would disrupt the current homeostatic nature of global economics, thwart the future of human and animal medical research and endeavors, and cause an imbalance in the natural environment that all organisms live in.
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2/23/2016 9:44:12TianEricAlthough having a Bill of Rights might bring additional freedom to animals, it is unnecessary as it dampens the economy, makes animals equal to humans, and ecosystems would get overpopulated.
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