Epy Shorts 2018
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Title of Short Story
Author NameExtra General Comments by Judges
Average Rating (across all judges)
Artist Assigned
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WINNERS
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A DreamE R Gurney
a: The story was beautifully and poetically written, it got me completely immersed in the plot, it was original in a way
most other stories weren't, and the retention was really good, meaning I read it in one breath.
It also left me wanting to read a sequel.

b: I simply loved how the author structured the story. Very poetic and unique. I'd never would expect prose to be
written this way. Simply mezmerizing, even till the end.
Language: 9/10
Reader Engagement: 9/10
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 5/5
Total: 27/30
blurip.episode
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Forget-You-NotArina Herman
a: The author has great command of the English language, even though it was written in a simple style. The story's
premise is engaging through-out, and its plot carries a smooth flow.

b: This reminded me of Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind (not as a copy, just as a general idea), it also left me
wanting more, and made me really sympathise with the main characters. There’s something about erased
memory, and honest feelings fighting through it, that I just find fascinating.
Language: 9 /10
Reader Engagement: 8.5/10
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 4/5
Total: 25.5/30
anyanka.episode
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Always and ForeverChloe W
a: The author has a great command of the English language and the story had a great flow. However, I felt that it
lacked some luster in terms of originality. I anticipated a much more interesting twist so creativity was slightly
lacking because I wasn't looking forward for more. Great use of dialogue, though, very natural and fluid.
Language: 9/10
Reader Engagement: 7/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 4/5
Total: 23/30
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"Hey there, Delilah"Kat Doll
a: An original story with impressive twists. The author has a great command of the English language, however,
could use some help with formatting paragraphs. The way the author narrates is absolutely beautiful but the
chunky paragraphs may scare or bore some reader with shorter attention span.

b: I really loved the originality and the moment of surprise in this story. I also found it beautifully written, and the
twist in the end got me goosebumps.
Language: 9/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 22/30
Raitazan
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ShortlistedPrize
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Choices That MatterTropical Paragon
a: The author has a good command of the English language and the story had a nice flow. The conversation
between the author and main character was very engaging, and in some ways, quirky. The ending was slightly
abrupt, but served the plot well. Even though I'm unsure of what could be a possible hook for this short story, I think
a continuation for a longer novel would be interesting. The story was cute and memorable, however, does not give off
a 'wow' impact.
Language: 8/10
Reader Engagement: 7/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow:3/5
Total: 21/30
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A Despondent Ballad
for Sophia
Evelyn V
a: The author has a great command of the English language and the story had a great flow. The plot was unexpected
yet appropriate for the theme but it lacked some 'oomph'. A truly well written story that unfortunately lacked unique
memorability.
Language: 8/10
Reader Engagement: 7/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 21/30
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Empty CasketJazmine
a: The author has a great command of the English language and the story had a decent flow. The story was oddly
comedic, but the author could do without the capitalization of dialogue, make use of punctuation or try
bolding/italicizing. The ending was funny, however, I wasn't quite sure where the plot was going througout the entire
story.
Language: 8/10
Reader Engagement: 7/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 2/5
Total: 20/30
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The Time In Between
Lady Bird
a: The author has a fairly good command of the English language and the story had a nice flow, however, the mistake
of putting commas after the double quotation marks in writing dialogue (especially direct speech) reoccurs. It indicates
the author's lack of knowledge for punctuation rules. Punctuation aside, the syntax is nice and simple, and the plot
was engaging. The story flow was also nicely paced.
Language: 7/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 4/5
Total: 20/30
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MarkedCassidy Caravella
a: The author has a great command of the English language and the story had a nice flow. Great syntax, great pace,
fluid dialogues and really nice paragraphing. The story itself fairly well-written, but lacks more a unique 'wow' factor
for memorability.
Language: 8/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 20/30
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RecurMars
a: The story was fairly good, however, lacked in various aspects. Even with little to no grammatical errors, the author
still does not manage to lure in readers. It wasn't super cliche nor slow-paced, but I wasn't exactly looking forward to
reading the next line. It wouldn't hurt to add in more of a twist because the feeling of deja vu isn't the most
unique hook of cliffhanger.
Language: 7/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3.5/5
Story Content Pace/Flow:3/5
Total: 19.5/30
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Honourable Participants
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Lost in timeDominika Machová
a: Some participant stories were fairly written well, some were decent but none of them were unique impactful
or memorable enough for the top spots. Some do require some improvements in terms of grammar and punctuation.
However, all had great potential to be even better. Commendable efforts!


General Advice:
- Watch out for commas after double quotation marks in your direct speech.

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The general rule:

Double quotes (") are preferred in American English, while single quotes (') are more common in British English:

"I'm coming home late tonight," she said. (American English)
'I'm coming home late tonight,' she said. (British English)

In general, comma and periods are often come before closing your quotations. The only time to use it after quotation
marks is when quoting within direct speech.

If we quote
within direct speech, we use the other style for the embedded quotation:

"She said, 'I'm coming home late tonight'," recalled Jim. (American English)
'She said, "I'm coming home late tonight",' recalled Jim. (British English)

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- Be careful when using ellipses. There should only be (...) three periods, no more, no less.

- Unless you plan to do an informal script, direct speech dialogues should be used with quotations (") in prose.

- When italicizing or bolding, make sure to use them minimally to create a bigger impact on your narration. Try not to
italicatize an entire paragraph unless there is a specific purpose, like a short flashback for instance.

- Remember to divide your texts in paragraphs. It's really hard to read with big, chunky paragraphs. They're an
eye strain!

- Try not to use multiple punctuations of the same types (!!!) for professionalism.
Language: 7/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 17/30
NONE
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The Ghost of MeDee Vine
Language: 8/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 4/5
Total: 19/30
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Again...and againAlex Woods
Language: 5/10
Reader Engagement: 5/10
Creativity/Originality: 2.5/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 2.5/5
Total: 15/30
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Blurred Demise Sunny Lee
Language: 6/10
Reader Engagement: 4/10
Creativity/Originality: 2.5/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 2.5/5
Total: 15/30
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AFTER I DIEDSHONA
Language: 5/10
Reader Engagement: 4/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 15/30
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SilhouetteBlair Mclaren
Language: 6/10
Reader Engagement: 5/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 2/5
Total: 16/30
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Unmasking Each
Other
May Lisa Magical
Language: 7/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 19/30
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Lost in the unknown.
Harine and Harrshita
Language: 6/10
Reader Engagement: 5/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 2/5
Total: 16/30
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One Last TimeMaryanne Gubon
Language: 7/10
Reader Engagement: 6/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 19/30
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Only for youML
Language: 6/10
Reader Engagement: 7/10
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Story Content Pace/Flow: 3/5
Total: 17/30
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