Your topic for analysis
|Your working thesis||Dr. X's Feedback|
|11/16/2015 15:15:04||jaeRoxx||Power struggles||My working thesis is to bring the the domestic violence aspect of power struggles in the novel to the forefront.||This is phrased as a topic. You need an argument such as this one: Doro's treatment of Anyanwu can be best defined as domestic abuse.|
|11/16/2015 15:17:52||Nelly4you||Strong female protagonist||My Working Thesis: I believe that Anyanwu is stronger then Doro.||Yes. (spelling error: "than" rather than "then")|
|11/16/2015 15:18:53||Helectronic||Gender Identity||In Wild Seed, Octavia Butler uses traditional gender roles to illustrate the oppression that women face, as well as to dispute the idea that feminine strength and characteristics are weaker than men's.||The first part is a bit wordy: In Wild Seed, Octavia Butler uses traditional gender roles to illustrate the oppression of women |
I do not know what you mean by "feminine strength and characteristics" --can you be more specific? (submit again and let me know you did so by e-mail)
|11/16/2015 15:22:22||GarciaGiselleLiz||Power struggles||As the time advances, society does the same, for example, we realize technology becomes more functional in practical terms, some cannot understand while others become experts. Now, there is one factor we must consider in society, is equality ever going to adhered by gender roles? Do all individuals even realize there is a dis pair between Men and women, is this acceptable or does our tradition and mind set interfere?||How is this an analysis of Wild Seed? Also, this sounds like an introduction rather than a thesis.|
|11/16/2015 15:22:45||jlefish||gender roles, power struggles||I posit that Butler has created a god-like character in Anyanwu. Doro is not the only character possessing god-like qualities, Anyanwu embodies God as love,||Love it! Needs a semicolon to avoid comma splicing: Doro is not the only character possessing god-like qualities; Anyanwu embodies God as love.|
|11/16/2015 15:26:27||Sylster||Power struggles||In Wild Seed, Butler explains how Doro uses love and sex as a device in order to have dominance over Anyanwu.||He is vampiric that way, no? The phrasing needs some work: Doro uses love and sex as tools to dominate Anyanwu.|
|11/16/2015 15:30:47||becheverria96||Power struggles||In Wild Seed, Octavia Butler uses Doro and Anyanwu's characters as representations of mens dominance of women throughout the years. The fact that Anyanwu doesn't completely submit, and in the end is able to compromise with Doro, sends the message that women can hope for more than constant oppression.||Okay. Somewhat derivative, but it will all depend on how the paper is written.|
|11/16/2015 15:33:50||mercefulme!||Egenics||Although Doro may think its OK to play God we should take into account the ethical aspects of his actions. Thus realizing the consequences in altering the process of evolution.||Informal language. Essays in college are usually formal. Also, the focus is not on an analysis of the novel, but on a judgment of a character.|
So, how about something like this:
Butler introduces the community-building character of Anyanwu to criticize Doro's means to obtain race of super-humans.
Also: See #13 below
|Afrofuturism||Afrofuturism has been around for many years. Afrofuturism should be perserved so African-Americans in the future can preserve their traditions for future generations to come after them.||I am not sure how this argument connects to Wild Seed. You need something like|
In Wild Seed, Butler contributes to the practice of Afrofuturism by creating a race of genetically-mutated superhumans ruled by two very different black leaders. While Doro's management of his people recalls the Western world's kidnapping and enslavement of Africans during the slave trade, Anyanwu's government points to the possibility of multi-ethnic communities run with an Afro-centric sensibility.
|11/16/2015 15:45:27||lau.marulo||Power struggles||To be free, Anywanwu must discard her identity as a woman and escape to hybrid spaces.||Dang! Very nice.|
|African Mythology||No matter where you are going the tradition you grew up upon will mold your future.|
For example: even Anyanwu moved to America, she carried her tradition of heals people. One of the belief of African mythology is supernatural that influence human life, each one have spirits, could be good or bad.
|Nope. The part of the idea that has value is the Afro-centric sensibility as a means to mold the future. (See my response to UptownHarry in #10)|
So something like:
Anyanwu's African roots serve as the foundation of her and her people's future in America.
|11/16/2015 15:52:42||Bnational4||Eugenics||Wild Seed is about a man who tries to create a race by controlling genes. Anyanwu proves to us that controlling genes have a dark side to it.||See my response to mercefulme! in #9 above.|
OR: Wild Seed is about a man who tries to create a super race by controlling genes and about a woman who proves that the means to obtain such a super race are as important as the ends.
|11/16/2015 15:54:15||celavie97||eugenics is a form of slavey||Doro and Anywanwu are slaves to their powers.||Intriguing. Clear. Can you support it? That IS the question.|
|11/16/2015 15:54:17||Serrate13||Slavery||In Wild Seed, Octavia Butler makes a huge connection between the science fictional world and reality, by illustrating Doro's dominance over wild seed in order to procreate humans with special abilities associating it in similarity to slavery, in which slaves are sold and told to mate amongest themselves in order to create more slaves.||Derivative of Helford and others. Your thesis should be original. See my comments to UptownHarry in #10 above.|
|11/16/2015 15:56:06||cahdee||Power struggles||Butler represents Doro as a male antagonist in which everyone must obey him. Anyanwu is a strong woman herself but cannot take control because of how males have a dominant role in society.||Descriptive--you are summarizing the novel. What is your point? See, for example becheverria's thesis in #8 above|
|Power struggles||Authors Octavia E Butler Wild Seed is a contrast between Doro's desire for complete control and Anyanwu's freedom of independence.||Almost there. To avoid being mostly descriptive and derivative, try filling in the end of this sentence: In Wild Seed, Butler contrasts Doro's desire for complete control and Anyanwu's freedom and independence because.....|
|11/16/2015 16:23:53||legend923||Power struggles||In Wild Seed, Butler uses stereotypes of masculine versus feminine to illustrate a battle of evil versus good, as Doro seeks to build an empire of humanoids like him and Anyanwu seeks to build places of safety and freedom for her own lineage of people.||Not bad, though it needs a bit of tweaking: In Wild Seed, Butler uses gender stereotypes to illustrate a battle of evil versus good, as Doro seeks to build an empire of humanoids like him and Anyanwu seeks to build places of safety and freedom for her own lineage of people.|
|11/16/2015 16:29:45||person316||control||Doro's need for control stems from his desire for companionship||Okay. Doable in four pages|
How Gender Becomes The Definition Of The Spirit Within The Flesh; One Must Become a Master to Divert Being A Slave.
Eugenics as colonialism
eugenics as an aid to colonialism as in the Australian penal colony experiment and the U S A Slavery a selection for the hardy specimens.