Revising
Content Standards
Multiliteracies and Communicative Competence
-The learners demonstrate their multiliteracies and communicative competence in evaluating informational texts (academic text: expository essays) and transactional texts (letter of request) for clarity of meaning, purpose, and target audience as a foundation for publishing original informational and transactional texts.
Learning Competency
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Publish a multimodal informational text for one's purpose and target audience: Expository Essay
-Students will develop skills to create and publish expository essays that effectively communicate information to their intended audience.
Learning Objectives: Prewriting
Identify Environmental Problems
Identify a specific problem related to environmental awareness and preservation and brainstorm possible solutions.
Define Purpose and Audience
Describe the specific situations where the problem exists, the target readers of the problem solution essay, and the purpose for writing it.
Learning Objectives: Revising
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Revise for Clarity and Validity
-Revise the draft for clarity of main idea and validity/verifiability of supporting details.
Learning Objectives: Editing
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Edit for Grammar and Mechanics
-Edit the grammar, word choice, and writing mechanics of the problem-solution essay.
Learning Objectives: Publishing
Digital or printed brochure
Digital or printed pamphlet
Digital or printed posters
Social media posts (Facebook, Instagram, etc.)
Publish a multimodal problem-solution text for one's purpose and audience in any of these formats.
Short Review: Hydro Highlights
-The teacher asks the students to recall what they think are the highlights from the previous discussion or any insights and realizations related to the topic.
-He or she gives the students a moment to think and then asks for volunteers to share their answers with the class.
Feedback: Marine Marvels
-The class will be divided into groups of four to five members. Each student is requested to recall and share a moment from a previous lesson where they believe they performed exceptionally well, explaining the reasons for their outstanding performance.
Marine Marvels: Group Discussion
Share Exceptional Moments
Group members will take turns sharing their experiences and collectively brainstorm ideas to enhance and reinforce their positive attributes.
Present Insights
Each group will select a representative to present their insights and feedback to the class.
Marine Marvels: Guide Questions
Best Performance
1.What specific moment or task from the previous lesson do you believe showcases your best performance?
Contributing Factors
2.What actions or behaviors do you think contributed to your exceptional
performance?
Future Application
3.How can you apply the strengths demonstrated in this moment to future tasks and challenges?
Group Support
4.How can your group support each other in enhancing these positive
attributes?
Lesson Purpose: Navigating the Revision Seas
"In the vast ocean of words, revision is the compass that guides your essay to its intended harbor."
Reflecting on the Sailing Metaphor
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Image Description
What can you say about the images? How will you describe each image?
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Adjusting Sails
Why does the sailor need to adjust the sails? How can you relate this image to writing?
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Consequences
What might happen if the sails are not adjusted properly, and how does this compare to an essay that hasn't been thoroughly revised?
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Focus and Attention
What do the sailor's focus and attention tell us about the importance of careful attention during revision?
Unlocking Content Vocabulary: Wharf of Words
Word Scramble Activity
To familiarize the students with the key terms that they will encounter throughout the lesson, the teacher presents to the students the 'Wharf of Words' word scramble activity. A definition will be provided to aid the learners in unlocking the words. The learners should be given enough time to figure out the words.
1. NEEUEQS
Hint: The order in which things happen or are arranged
2. VNSEOIIR
Hint: The process of reviewing, editing, and improving something, such as a written work or a plan
3. TICRLYA
Hint: Clearness or transparency in communication, making ideas easy to understand.
4. SOCIIRNEP
Hint: Accuracy, exactness, or attention to detail in the way something is done or expressed.
5. TGWRINI
Hint: The act or process of expressing ideas, thoughts, or information through written language
Wharf of Words: Answer Key
1. Sequence
The order in which things happen or are arranged
2. Revision
The process of reviewing, editing, and improving something, such as a written work or a plan
3. Clarity
Clearness or transparency in communication, making ideas easy to understand
4. Precision
Accuracy, exactness, or attention to detail in the way something is done or expressed
5. Writing:
The act or process of expressing ideas, thoughts, or information through
written language
Reflection Questions
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Familiarity
-Are you familiar with the words you have unlocked in the word scramble activity? How familiar are you with these words?
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Practical Application
-Do you have any idea on how these words are applied practically?
3
Expectations
-Knowing that these words are important terminologies in our lesson, what are your expectations for this session?
What does revision mean?
To See Again
-Revision means looking at your work with fresh eyes to improve it
After drafting and before editing
-Revision takes place between the drafting and editing phases in the Writing Process
What does revision mean?
The opportunity to construct the "perfect" piece
-We learn to write by rewriting. Revision gives us the opportunity to construct the "perfect" piece of communication.
Looking at the "big picture"
-We call it "global" Revision because we are looking at the "big picture" of the paper.
The 4 R's of Revision
Adding
Look for ideas which you didn't use
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Rearranging
Rearrange words or sentences
2
Removing
Take out a few paragraphs or words
3
Replacing
Replace overused or unclear words
4
Explicitation: Reflection Pool
Explicitation: Reflection Pool
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Current Progress
-What some specific improvements or changes have you made in writing your initial draft?
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Importance of Reflection
-Why is it important to reflect on the progress you've made and the insights you've gained during the writing process before embarking on the journey of revising your essay?
Worked Example:
Set The Sails
What is Revising?
Revising is the third stage of the writing process.
This is where you improve what you wrote by adding more information, omitting unnecessary details, re-arranging ideas, and even paraphrasing.
Revising allows the author a second chance to catch mistakes missed during the creation of the draft.
How is Revising done?
Review the topic and focus of the paper. Ensure that the topic and thesis statement do not stray from the given prompt of your writing task.
Check the sequence of ideas. How you structure your expository essay is important. Consider the effectiveness of your paper’s structure to guide a reader through your points while maintaining their interest.
Assess your word choice and examine the clarity, conciseness, and precision of the language used in.
Making Ripples (Practice Task)
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Read Through
Read through your entire draft from start to finish without
making any annotations
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Mark Areas for Revision
Use colored pens or highlighters to mark areas that require revision
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Add Comments
Write comments on your write-up by utilizing sticky notes or scribble notes on the edges
Areas to Mark for Revision
Confusing Sentences
Identify sentences that are unclear or difficult to understand
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Weak Evidence
Paragraphs that lack sufficient evidence or support
2
Underdeveloped Ideas
Ideas or arguments that need further development
3
Poor Transitions
Transitions that are weak or missing between paragraphs
4
Technical Errors
Grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors that need correction
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Worksheet:
Synthesis/Extended�What you have learned�In a one sheet of paper write something you understand about the lesson we discussed today.
Direction
Choose the correct answer for each of the following questions about revising written content.
Quiz Question 1
-Which of the following is the main goal of revising a written work?
A. To check for spelling errors
B. To improve the clarity and flow of ideas
C. To add more information to the text
D. To change the font and formatting
Quiz Question 2
-What is one technique used during the revision process?
A. Proofreading
B. Adding irrelevant details
C. Changing the font size
D. Skipping over confusing parts
Quiz Question 3
-Which of the following is most important when revising a paragraph for coherence?
A. Ensure that each sentence follows logically from the previous one
B. Add as many adjectives as possible to make the writing colorful
C. Focus only on fixing grammar and spelling errors
D. Change the structure of the paragraph completely
Quiz Question 4
-During revision, what should a writer focus on when checking for consistency?
A. Making sure the tone, style, and voice remain the same throughout the text
B. Adding new ideas or concepts that were not discussed in the draft
C. Ensuring that every sentence begins with the same word
D. Rewriting the entire essay without checking the first draft
Quiz Question 5
-Which of the following is an example of a structural change you might make during revision?
A. Correcting punctuation errors
B. Changing the order of paragraphs to improve the flow
C. Rewriting a sentence for better word choice
D. Correcting typos in individual words
Quiz Answer Key
1. b) To improve the clarity and flow of ideas
2. a) Proofreading
3. a) Ensure that each sentence follows logically from the previous one
4. a) Making sure the tone, style, and voice remain the same throughout the text
5. b) Changing the order of paragraphs to improve the flow
Thank You!