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Presented by Jeffrey Walker

Edison HS Theatre / Cappies Mentor & Writer and critic

2022-23

Welcome!

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AGENDA

Introduction

SECTION I: Cappies Writing Rules

SECTION II: Guide to Excellence

Follow up: “Live” Part 2

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INTRODUCTION:

Why are you here?

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

The aspects of writing that you can work on right away

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

SUPER BASIC TIP:

  • Write in Word/Google Docs
  • Copy and paste into CIS

Formatting and cosmetics may be lost but that’s okay.

Be sure you read the CIS-i-fied version for strange looking marks or punctuation

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

DO. NOT. PLAGIARIZE.

  • Full stop.
  • And be careful of the appearance of copying someone else’s work

This is one of the quickest ways to get removed as a Cappie

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Write in third person, past tense

Nim Takeiato proved there are no small parts by making the bellboy a scene-stealer.

Adele Sassoon performed the role of Miss Hannigan with a comic vengeance.

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Cut the jargon
  • Avoid informal, social-media savvy phrases

Throughout the performance, gobos were used to indicate the dense forest setting.

Throughout the performance, the specialized lighting helped establish a dense forest setting.

Maria Mendez, as Dolly Levi, was the CEO of the production.

Maria Mendez commanded the stage as Dolly Levi.

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Cut the clichés

From start to finish, Pfizer Academy’s tap choreography was on point.

Ricardo Nunez was a boss at playing the grandfather.

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Stay away from overused expressions, such as
    • “What do you get if you combine (blank) and (blank)”
    • “What do these things have in common?”

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

In your reviews, please work to use

  • Correct grammar and usage
  • Correct punctuation

According to The Associated Press Stylebook, The Chicago Manual of Style: periods and commas go inside quotation marks.

“Once more unto the breach,” declared young King Henry, played fervently by …

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

To help with grammar and usage

  • Use online help
    • Grammarly
    • After the Deadline
    • Hemingway Editor

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

Titles of shows

  • Be consistent
  • Chicago Style Manual: Italicize titles

Rent

Two Gentlemen of Verona

  • Instead of RENT or TWO GENTLEMEN OF VERONA
  • (avoid ALL CAPS unless it’s official)

To repeat: Be consistent

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Spell ALL names correctly – the famous and not yet famous

Use the program or Playbill for student names

“Pete Marshall, as Albert, excelled as a song and dance man.”

Take accurate and thorough notes

For established authors you can check the internet

  • Rogers and Hammerstien can easily be fixed

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Use NAMES as opposed to an actor or crew member’s pronouns

Unless specified in the Playbill/program.

The NAMES are what parents, etc. are looking for in published reviews

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Be on-time = Meet your deadlines
  • To shows and with your writing
  • The consequences for missing deadlines:
    • Reviews will not be Published if you miss your deadlines

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Deadlines - reminder

Like a snow-delayed show

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

Word count: Shoot for 450-525

        • 520 is the average (last year)
  • When you turn in a review under 300 or more than 600 words, you will be asked to re-write or revise + Reviews under or over will not be eligible for publication

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GENERAL WRITING RULES

  • Learn by example
  • Examples of reviews are interspersed throughout this presentation
    • Cappies reviews
    • Professional ones as well

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PUTTING THE AUDIENCE IN THE EXPERIENCE

But it’s the game-changing, life-size, horse puppets, from the South-African based Handspring Puppet Company, which are show-stopping winners.

It almost seems a misnomer to call them puppets because after a few minutes the audience forgets that there are two (surely exhausted) handlers inside working the animals’ legs and a third in charge of the head, the mane shaking off flies, the ears pricked and more.

They appear to take on a life of their own, galloping across the stage, kicking out, nuzzling up to the ensemble and fighting for survival on a battlefield.

You will fall in love with Joey, whose exploits we follow from unwanted foal to courageous war horse on the Front Line (and, yes, you will sob so bring plenty of tissues).

“War Horse,” by Anne Cox, Stage View

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GENERAL WRITING TIPS

  • Do not include negative comments directed at individuals
    • This goes for performers, musicians, or technical crew, etc

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GENERAL WRITING TIPS

  • Also be EXTREMELY careful of “constructive criticism”
      • Leave that to the experts

Criticize by

omission

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HANDLING “CRITICAL” MOMENTS

Despite some occasional struggles, the whole cast and crew of Lillian Osborne High School's production of Our Town were ultimately successful in conveying the story's simple yet meaningful messages and thoughts about life. This performance surely left the audience pondering those messages long after they exited the confines of the theatre.

~ Nathan Juguilon, Blessed Oscar Romero (Edmonton, Alberta)

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CAPPIES GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • Include all the points made so far
  • Keep in mind the basics of journalism

Answer the 5 W’s & the H:

Who? What? When? Where? Why? How?

The HOW is your review

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“THE�ROOM WHERE IT HAPPENS!”

Before you write your review remember:

You can only write about what is discussed in the Cappies room

During discussion time, make sure to speak up and say what you want to write about

The

Cappies

Room

is

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GETTING TO WORK:

  1. Take good notes at the show AND in the cappies room
  2. While your thoughts are fresh, draft your review or expand on your notes. (A night’s sleep can erase good thoughts)
  3. The next morning or day, revisit your draft (or your notes), to revise, craft, and refine your review
  4. Another set of eyes can be very helpful – lead critic, buddy system, etc – before you submit!

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7 PARAGRAPH REVIEW GUIDE

  1. A Strong Opening (lead-in)
  2. The Story & background
  3. Production itself
  4. Lead actors
  5. Supporting cast
  6. Technical elements
  7. Conclusion

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • A Strong Opening
    • Grab the reader’s attention
      • Use a quotation
      • Craft a clever hook
    • Trigger the reader to keep reading
    • ENTIRE REVIEW: Write so reader can visualize what you saw

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STRONG OPENING

“This is Chicago, kid. You can’t beat fresh blood on the walls.”

This past weekend, Chantilly High School tackled the popular musical Chicago. This 1975 musical with music by John Kander, lyrics by Fred Ebb, and book by Fred Ebb and Bob Fosse, tells the tale of Roxie Hart, who rockets to fame after murdering her lover Fred Casely …

~ Elizabeth Germain,

West Springfield High School

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • Brief history of the show
    • Short synopsis
    • Two or three concise sentences

Do your homework – a little research can go a long way

Remember: What is discussed in the Cappies room

TIP:

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HISTORY & SYNOPSIS

Meredith Willson's The Music Man is an American classic that stands the depths of time, receiving five Tony Awards including Best Musical since its original Broadway debut in 1957. The Music Man follows Professor Harold Hill as he prowls around town with a plan to con money from the citizens of River City.

~ Maurice Wade, Overbrook High School (South Jersey Cappies)

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • Critique the work of high school students
  • Your review is about the work of the high school actors, designers, and crew members of a particular school
    • Adult participants should not be mentioned
    • Younger performers should be praised or not mentioned

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

At the minimum:

  • Mention 3 actors by name
    • Leading actors, supporting performers
  • Mention 2 tech/designers by name
    • Students who designed, built, created …

What did these students contribute to the production

  • When in doubt - OMIT

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MENTIONING INDIVIDUALS & TECHNICAL ELEMENTS

Suryanshu Kommoju provoked sympathy with his outstanding performance as the sheepish, loving, and gullible Amos. In "Mr. Cellophane" his intricate vocal performance balanced loud and soft notes to display both anger and sorrow. Also of note was Rosa Broadberry's bright operatic voice as Mary Sunshine and Max James and Piper Read's technical skill as featured dancers.

~ Elizabeth Germain, West Springfield High School

Review of CHICAGO

Cappies style

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MENTIONING INDIVIDUALS & TECHNICAL ELEMENTS

Sets, designed by Jaylan Enriquez and Libby Doty, were functional and versatile. The team used periaktoi * to display the various settings throughout the musical. Additionally, the set team created a moving clock for Cinderella's time limits with magic. The lighting, by Eleanor Brunsman and Christa Nalda, was appropriate and added to the mood of the show through techniques such as using pink light during love scenes and having different color palettes for each character.

~ Cameron Zakreski, Fairfax High School

Cappies style

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • A descriptive and honest analysis of the performance and production
  • The “heart” of your review

Your assessment of the performance & highlights of what made it memorable for you

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REVIEW�& ANALYSIS

Scott Eagle High School was filled with laughter as the cast and crew of their production of It's Murder in the Wings lit up the stage. From crazy 1980's hair to hilarious slapstick comedy, Scott High School dazzled the room.

… Characters such as Donald McShane, Maxie Dunsell, Eddie, and Bobbie June who were played by Dustin Carlson, Tyreke Padgett, Denzil Hamm, and Lenaya Sharp were quick and witty and played off the others with ease. Noah Holtman who portrayed the role of Lionel Upshaw went from eccentric writer to cold blooded murderer in a matter of seconds and did so impeccably …

Scott High School's production brought a bright and whimsical air to the classic whodunit murder mystery. The audience was on the edge of their seats in complete wonder and curiosity throughout the show, being drawn in by the quick humor, colorful costuming, and mysterious characters. Hats off to the cast and crew of It's Murder in the Wings!

~ Emma Grace Geckle, McAuley High School (Cincinnati)

Cappies style

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GUIDE TO EXCELLENCE

  • Finish strong

An opening that grabs and a closing that they remember will elevate your review.

Always think of ways to wrap up your review

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STRONG CLOSING

Archmere Academy's production of Middletown, brought to life by the cast's passion, energy, and candidness, proved to us that despite life's unpleasantries and absurdities, “it’s not rare, but it’s lucky, to be human.”

~ Eden Halterman, Academy of the New Church (Cappies, Philly)

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STRONG CLOSING

In his director’s notes, Derek Goldman said the main question of Our Class is “What could any of us have done?” In a Polish village, many years ago, that question still lingers. And now it lingers on a bare stage at Theater J, asking a new generation the same question.

~ Jeffrey Walker, “Our Class,” on DC Theatre Scene (Oct 22, 2012)

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FINAL THOUGHTS

Always write your reviews with these other points in mind:

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CAPPIES WRITING PRINCIPLES

  • Work to be well-written and interesting

  • Make the reader “see” what you saw and experienced

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  • Use rich verbs
  • Limit the overuse of adjectives & adverbs
  • “Dolly walked into the room.” or
  • “Dolly sashayed into the room.”

CAPPIES WRITING PRINCIPLES

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DESCRIPTIVE LANGUAGE

This original musical has laughs, tears and joy - not to mention jaw-dropping star-turns - in a clash-of-cultures hoot that earns a big Broadway corsage.

  • Frank Rizzo, Variety (Nov 15, 2018) review of Broadway production of THE PROM

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DESCRIPTIVE LANGUAGE

Whether you call it a folk opera, a hip oratorio or a musicalized myth, it boasts some cracking songs that far outweigh its dramatic shortcomings.

  • Michael Billington, The Guardian (Nov 14, 2018)

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    • Write about your experience
  • Focus on the production you are writing about not the playwright, the composer, etc.

CAPPIES WRITING PRINCIPLES

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Clarksburg High School presented a colorful and bright production that emphasized the importance of staying true to your roots, even when they seem far away, and that family isn’t always the people who are related to you by blood.

  • Lina Snyder-Romero of South Lakes High School, 03/24/2017

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  • When you have met your deadline
  • Written your review
  • And Before you submit it

  • Pause for
  • ONE MORE STEP

CAPPIES WRITING PRINCIPLES

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SELF-EDITING�CHECKLIST

At the end of your Cappies “Writing Your Review” section

Self-check questions to use as a guide for self-editing

  1. Does the review sound good when read aloud?
  2. Does the opening grab the reader?
  3. Did you include basic story and background facts?
  4. Does it include notable actors, supporting players and tech highlights?
  5. Have you illustrated your opinion with vivid nouns and verbs describing the strengths you observed?
  6. Are all critiques general and brief in nature (not including names) that are followed by positives?
  7. Have you described your experience so that the reader can share your experience?
  8. Have you used a rich variety of words (avoiding clichés, redundancies, and jargon) and checked for grammar, spelling, and usage?
  9. Does it conclude with a tag-line or catchy ending – that is connected to the review as a whole?
  10. Does it sound like the production was the same one as discussed in the Cappies room?

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KEEP IN MIND

  • What you write affects people’s lives

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WHY ARE YOU HERE?

  • Writing rules and “how-to’s” are all well and good
  • BUT …

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CONCLUSION:�WHY ARE YOU HERE?

What does it mean to be a Cappies critic?

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WHAT IS IT ALL ABOUT?

“The Cappies program provides an unprecedented opportunity for students to think critically about a diverse range of theatre from Shakespearean tragedies to modern musicals.

Student critics, actors, and crew learn how to appreciate the nuances of theatre both on stage and behind the scenes.”

Lindsay Laviolette,

Ottawa Cappies program director and theatre teacher at St. Mother Teresa High School

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BREAK A LEG

ENJOY YOUR SHOWS

BE PROUD TO BE PART OF THE CAPPIES