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Writing a Personal Statement 101

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Why is it important?

It’s a chance to…

  • Show your personality
  • Discuss your educational journey
  • Demonstrate your ability to write
  • Affirm your desire to attend that program of study and goals

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Tip: Know Your Deadlines

Fall

Winter

Spring

Summer

UW Seattle

Transfer

Feb. 15th

Dec. 15th

UW Seattle

Freshman

Dec. 15th

Not available for freshman

UW Bothell Transfer

May 1st

Make your own chart and fill in the rest!

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You can get in just on your personal statement?

Many universities use a holistic review process which means that they are evaluating you on a multitude of factors (grades, leadership, personal statement, etc.)

Academics is a significant factor in deciding whether to admit a student but your personal statement (esp. for transfer students) is what is going to distinguish you from other applicants. Especially is your grades are below the average for admitted students, your personal statement is your chance show the admission committee that you should be in the program

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What is UW Seattle looking for? [Transfer]

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What is UW Seattle looking for? [Transfer]

Strong Academic Achievement = GPA and rigor of classes

Preparation for intended major = fulfilled prerequisites

New maturity / Consistency = increasing grade trends esp. during last 40 credits, focused class selection

Major uniquely available = assessing why you need to come to their school

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What is UW Seattle looking for Cont.? [Transfer]

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Think about these questions as you write

[For Transfer Students]

  • Why this major? Why are you excited about pursuing ____ degree?
  • What has your educational journey been like?
  • Have you done your research on the school and program, what opportunities would you like to pursue there?
  • Can you follow directions?
  • If you’ve gone through adverse circumstances, talk about it, talk about how you overcame that adversity and what lessons you learned

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Common Misconceptions #1

“I need to show them how much I know about my intended field” → NO

Remember who your audience is → admissions counselors and advisors that might not have that content knowledge

They want to see your academic POTENTIAL, not that you already know it all. If you knew it all then you wouldn’t need to join their program. Not everyone has been coding since they were 12 years old, and that is okay!

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Common Misconceptions #2

“I need to have out-of-class experience in my intended field” → Not necessarily

Again, they are not looking to see how much you know about ___ or ___ or how you’ve been able to work with this company or that company. These are definitely valuable experiences to have and talk about however admissions committee recognizes that not all students will get these opportunities. If you do have these opportunities or can get them, GREAT, but make sure you talk about them in a meaningful way in your personal statement.

Admissions committees want to see if you fit into the community. You can demonstrate your potential through activities that are not related to your intended field (transferable skills).

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Common Misconceptions #3

“I’ve gone through some stuff (struggles) and I don’t want to sound like I’m complaining” → Admissions committees wants to hear about the experiences that you’ve had that have shaped you and your journey

You might think that admissions committees don’t want to hear about how you’ve struggled or that it might come off as a “sob story” or that you’re complaining, but they do. They want to hear about anything related to your journey that is significant to you.

    • Not only that, but if you have had difficulties, how have you overcome them and what lessons have you gained from them?

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Common Misconceptions #4

“I should list all of the things that I’ve done in my essay” → NO, talk about the experiences that you’ve had that are most significant to you

Remember it’s about quality not quantity

Not everyone is at a place where they can participate in extracurriculars after class but everyone spends time doing something, so talk about it

Be specific. If you say you participated in ___ Club the person reading it isn’t going to automatically know what skills you’ve gained, what reflections you made just because you named it.

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Common Misconceptions #5

“I should tell them why their school is so great” → Not exactly. Focus on how the school/program can benefit you but don’t go on an on about everything they have there

Remember that admissions counselors want to learn about you. You can talk about the opportunities that the school will provide you and how it will further your education/career goals BUT don’t tell them about everything you love about their school. Always focus on the conversation on you, not them.

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Motivation

“Thirty years ago my older brother, who was ten years old at the time, was trying to get a report written on birds that he'd had three months to write, which was due the next day. We were out at our family cabin in Bolinas, and he was at the kitchen table close to tears, surrounded by binder paper and pencils and unopened books about birds, immobilized by the hugeness of the task ahead. Then my father sat down beside him put his arm around my brother's shoulder, and said, "Bird by bird, buddy. Just take it bird by bird.

---Anne Lamott, Author

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Don’t forget!

You all have experiences and thoughts that are unique to you. Let that shine in your essay

The more a statement conveys how a person thinks, what he or she thinks is important, or other such insights, the better. You should think of the statement as an opportunity to round out pieces to the puzzle that makes up your application. Write about issues or problems you think about and how you have dealt with them. The more personal you can bethe more you can bring in your own background or historythe more valuable the statement can be. “

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Getting Started on your Statement

  1. Read the questions
  2. Brainstorm
  3. Organize your ideas
  4. Add the details
  5. Piece the parts together
  6. Revise
  7. Get Feedback
  8. Revise Again

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Tip: Start Early

Give yourself the time needed to thoroughly work through the brainstorming, writing, and editing processes.

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Step #1: Read the questions

Read the questions about think about:

  • What do they want to know about you?
  • What personal qualities do they value?
  • What type of student are they looking for?

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Step #2: Brainstorm Ideas

[Ideas-Everyone’s writing process will look different]

  • Brainstorm a list of defining events that led you to this point in your academic career (e.g. Running Start, biology lab, physics project, an experience from work, starting a family)
  • Write as if you were talking to a friend. What would you tell them about why you want to pursue this program/field and why it’s the best choice for you
  • Imagine you have five minutes to talk to an admission committee, what would you tell them and why?

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Step #2: Brainstorm Ideas Cont.

Try to answer these questions

  • Who are you?
  • What is your area of interest?
  • What experiences do you have?
  • What are you career goals?
  • What have you overcome?
  • What you looking for in a college experience?
  • What do you hope to accomplish after your degree?

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Step #3: Organize

Narrow down the ideas you want to use in your personal statement. Look at the list that you’ve generated, look at the questions they are asking you, and see where everything can fit.

UW-Seattle wants students to write about the following:

  • Academic history
  • Your major and career goals
  • Are you prepared? (What makes you so?)
  • How will this university help you achieve your goals?
  • Cultural understanding
  • Educational challenges and hardships
  • Experiential learning

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Step #4: Add the Details

TELL:

I’ve overcome a lot of obstacles in life

SHOW: This is more effective

As the first person in my family to attend college, I had to convince my brothers and sisters that higher education was a worthwhile pursuit. Although my brothers made fun of me for attending community college, I never wavered in my dedication to succeed.

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Motivation

“You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories.”

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Tip: Don’t worry about meeting the word count just yet

Write the rough draft of your essay. Don’t worry about the length or making it perfect right away.

More ideas will flow out of you if you just keep writing. It’s better to have more to work with than not enough.

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Tip: You don’t have to start with the intro paragraph

Sometimes it’s helpful to get the body paragraphs written and have a unifying theme in mind before you think about how you want to hook the reader in the intro

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Step #5: Piecing the Parts Together

What ties your statement together? What parts go well together?

  • Read over your list
  • Is there a pattern or theme to your story?
    • Is there one type of event or personality trait that pops up again and again?
    • What kind of path led you here? Was it a straight shot or a treacherous climb?
    • Have certain motivators influenced your decisions throughout your life?
  • Write down your theme on the paper.

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Step #5: Piecing the Parts Together

Theme = A Unifying Idea

“After reading this essay I want admissions counselors to know that I am a person that ___”

Examples:

    • Overcoming obstacles
    • Helping others
    • Taking on great challenges

Creates coherence and unity

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Step #6: Revise

Ask yourself the following:

  • Will the reader (the admission’s counselor) have a vivid picture of who I am after he/she is done reading the essay?
  • Are my goals well articulated?
  • Do I explain why I have selected this school and/or program in particular?
  • Do I demonstrate knowledge of this school or program?
  • Do I include interesting details that prove my claims about myself?
  • Does my introduction grab the reader’s attention? How so?
  • Is the direction of your essay clear from the 1st paragraph?
  • Do you establish a clear theme that will guide how the essay develops? What is it and why is it appropriate?
  • Does your statement have continuity and focus and a successful organizational structure? How can you tell?
  • Is your conclusion interesting? How so? Does it pull things together?

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Step #7: Ask for Feedback

Getting a second opinion is good! Having a different pair of eyes to read your essay can help you see if something doesn’t make sense or anything needs more elaboration

Example of guidance to give to the reader:

“Can you let me know if I’m getting _______ across?”

“This is the prompt for the essay, do you think I’ve answered it well?”

“I’m not confident about my grammar, could you give me suggestions”

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Step #7: Ask for Feedback Cont.

Email to send to your reader:

“Dear _____,

I’m in the process of writing my personal statement to (school). I was wondering if you have time to read it and provide feedback? The application is due (date), but I’d like to have a final draft finished by (date).

[Attach link to personal statement, it’s best to share it via Google Docs so that the reader can use the “suggestion” function. Also be sure to include the prompt and the word count limit at the top of the document]

Please let me know if you have the time to read my essay

Best,

(Your Name)

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Tip: For Revising

After you have a draft of your personal statement. Highlight everything that an admissions counselor would have learned about you from reading this essay.

If there isn’t highlighting in every paragraph, how can you add to that paragraph?

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Things to Avoid

  • Write what you think they want to hear
  • Clichés
    • I played with legos growing up
    • I thought I had so much to teach them but in fact, they taught me so much more
  • Fawning over the school
  • Talking about money as a motivator
  • Emphasize the negative
  • Informal tone or slang
  • Poor grammar and spelling
  • Don’t spell the school name wrong
  • Repeat information directly from the application form itself unless you use it to illustrate a point or want to develop it further
  • Being vague

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Get feedback from...

  • RiSE and/or MESA
  • The Writing Center (Learning Support Center-Mukilteo)
  • Fiends, peers, instructors
  • Some universities will allow prospective students to use their writing center (e.g. UW Bothell)
  • Advisor in your intended department. They may not always be able to read and provide feedback on your entire essay BUT they can give you tips

Have multiple people read it but don’t forget that it’s your voice that needs to evident

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Other Resources

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Motivation

Think of your writing as a gift to the world.

“It’s such a gift for someone to tell you the truth, and it’s such a gift for someone to create art with the mess and the chaos and the despair of life, to have turned it into a song, a poem, a novel. It’s the hugest gift we have to offer one another.”

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Join a STEM Student Support Program at Edmonds CC

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References