UC Essay Feedback
Mr. Chilton
For today, you’ll need:
Answering your College Questions
Add your own, read over answers,
in-depth answers will be provided in class if necessary
Common App Prompts Peer/Self Evaluation
You’ll need a pencil or pen to write on the essay.
Peer/Self Evaluation Time:
�Follow the steps on the next slide at your own pace.
If you get done early, continue with this presentation, clicking on links to model essays and tips I’ve posted in next slide.
Essay Drafts:
15 minutes max→ Go to next slide if done early
Look back over their comments...
Chilton’s Feedback on your UC prompts
Simple proofreading mistakes:
Simple proofreading mistakes:
One word?
MS Word autocorrects to dash, Google Docs doesn’t
Simple proofreading mistakes:
Star on your paper where you change from good to bad, from negative to positive.
Is it less than halfway through the essay? Do you leave yourself room to elaborate and prove the positive?
Proofreading continued:
Conclusions
Draw a “t chart” at the end of your essay:
List the skills and character traits demonstrated in this essay based on the story/evidence you presented.
e.g. hardwork, experience with medicine
Possible college major(s), list of activities you’ll hopefully be involved in, possible career choices, possible things you’ll do in college (academic or otherwise)
The goal of the conclusion is to specifically connect these two things.
Sentence 1 (options 1-5) is general and abstract. Sentence 2 (option 6) is very specific and concrete.
X marks the spot: Improving on comment “X”
Common comments on uncommon non-Common app essays...
I just really wish I had a model of what it’s supposed to look like...I need direction.
Model Essays: Click here
Even more time leftover,
we could...
Student Workshop on UC essays:
Let’s learn from these together.
Switch input to Doc Cam.
Fake Job Interview of Chilton
Ask him a UC prompt, models responses.