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EOC
Part A (30-45 min) (14.5%)
Rubric
What they are looking for
Step 1 (1-2 min)
The author’s main idea is that doing X helps us do/feel/experience X because X
- EX: Peter Levine’s argument is that the United States should lower its voting age from 18 to 17 in order to promote informed voting, expand the national electorate and in turn, strengthen the nation's democracy as a whole
Step 2 (8-10 min)
In “article,” by author argues thesis from above
Author last name begins w/1st claim, which is X
The author elaborates on this idea (reason), then give example author uses
- EX: Pau begins with her 1st claim: reading sensory words helps activate meaning in other parts of the brain. The author elaborates on this idea, believing words relate to senses can stimulate areas of the brain in the same way that experiencing them in real life would. Examples relating to smell and touch/texture are given to support the claim (this last part could use some work)
Do that 2x more (making sure to connect claims 2-3 back to 1)
- Ex: believing something to be true makes it true because it blurs the line of reality/fiction as shown thru X
o Such a claim connects to the first claim because people reading sensory text stimulate a response that’s similar to the real world
- Ex: Social interactions read in text can be reflected to a person’s social interaction in real life
o Such stimulation helps the human brain learn just as much from fiction as a real-world situation
Conclude – recap the 3 points
- EX: Paul builds her argument around three interconnected claims: first that neurological responses to sensory words is the same as experiencing them in real life, second that believing something to be true allows it to become true, because it blurs the line between reality and fiction, and finally, that social interactions read in a text can be reflected into irl social interactions because the human brain learns just as much in each situation
Identify 3-5 claims
Step 3 (8-10 min)
Start off with a topic sentence
- Ex: Throughout the article “title” Author, (author name) cites past studies of neuroscience to support her claim that reading stories and literature stimulates the brain and can improve social interaction
Evidence for claim 1
- Be specific in citing claims
- What’s included, what is a claim with evidence? How effective is it? Are there claims that don’t have evidence? Are their claims that have weak evidence?
- EX: Aligning with her 1st claim, Paul opens her article citing a 2006 study from the scientific journal NeuroImage to support the idea sensory words can bring about the same neurological response as the five senses can in real life. The study tested multiple subjects, using an imaging machine to measure how stimulated a person's brain was upon hearing different sensory and non-sensory words. The research provided is applicable and appears to be credible, and somewhat relevant (2006) coming from a scientific magazine. (personally, I would separate these things into different sentences and make 2006 an indict not a +). However, the article does not give any information as to who conducted the study, only specifying that the scientists were in Spain. Identifying an organization or institute can improve credibility.
- The Author’s second claim, that CLAIM, however the author does not cite any study, and instead uses cause and effect relationship as evidence for this claim. Such a lack of evidence results in a lack of credibility because Paul does not include any research or stats to help bolster the point. This, without any evidence or research, the overall credibility of the article is damaged.
- Claim #3 is pretty much like claim #1
Evaluate the aforementioned 3-5 claims
How it scored
Tips and Tricks
- Take 5 min and read the passage once, then go back and annotate
- Part A is a series of short answers, not an essay
- Don't be afraid to spend 35-40 min here
Part B (1 HR 30 Min) (31.5%)
Rubric
What they are looking for
How it scored
Things I notice
Intro:
- No citations in the intro, somewhat descriptive, very much based off personal thought, the intro just reads like something Jack would say. It’s kind of like a DBQ with contextualization, but much less specific, instead of focusing on only industrial capitalism, it focuses on capitalism more holistically.
Paragraphs 1-3:
- Strong topic sentence, somewhat more broad than a DBQ or LEQ
- When introducing a document, instead of DOC C, introduce Author, credibility, from source letter, (Christopher, journalist from the WaPo, in source C) OR credibility author (Journalist Christopher from source C)
- Don’t be afraid NOT to quote, you CAN quote but you also CAN explain findings like you would on a DBQ (keeping in mind MOST evidence is quoted)
- Credibility is your friend, the more sources that support ur claim the better.
- Think Claim, Evidence, Warrant (Claim = topic sentence, Evidence = credible person who you cited AND what they say, warrant = implication, why it matters, what it means)
o Claim EX: The forfeiture of leisure time is not only unreasonable but also an unhealthy practice that leads to decreased overall productivity.
o Non-Quoted Evidence EX: Journalist Christopher Muther from source C found that many Americans forfeited the few vacation days they had and have been increasingly working longer hours. In his article, Muther cites Project: Time off, which explains why Americans work so much, citing fears of extra work and desires for mobility in their company, amongst other concerns.
o Quoted Evidence EX: In source A, author Paula Cohen explains how many people “plan to work hard at well-paying but unsatisfying jobs for a number of years to earn the money they need to retire early. Others say they won’t mind working long, tedious hours if they get adequate vacation time”
o Warrant EX: This mentality is a perfect example of the prioritization of productivity and becomes concerning when one considers the detriments of overworking. In addition, this extra work oftentimes does not come from a true passion for one’s line of work, but rather from a desire to accumulate large amounts of wealth for pleasures the modern worker assures themselves will come in the future.
Outro:
- Much like an IWA call to action, generally 1-2 sentences are a good wrap up point, it very much recaps an idea.
- EX: Overall, it is vital that the modern worker learns to prioritize the qualitative over the quantitative. Leisure time is essential when it comes to living a healthy, productive, and fulfilling life that one can look back upon in admiration rather than exhaust.
Tips and Tricks
- Read all 4, you get 90 minutes here, that's 5-10 min a source, leaves 60 min to write. Really use citations out of the stimmy material.
- Try to use 3-4 sources, rather than just 2
- Look at the titles of the article to see how you can tie them together
- 20-30 to read, 60 to write, the writing has to be a theme from the sources
- Intro needs a hook or lead, use an example, or anecdote, imagery, simple life observation, why do we care, some background, does anything need to be defined?
- (IF POSSIBLE) Use a source as part of the context, to set up the issue
- Introduce perspectives
- While some say X, others say Y
- Ultimately it's your thesis, what point are you trying to make. Outline your key reasons to support the argument.
- The key points become the body paragraphs
- Then outro/call to action
- Aim for 5 paragraphs
- Ways to do this
- First way
- Paragraph 1 + 2 are +
- Paragraph 3 is addressing the opposition
- 2nd way
- Pick it off as you go throughout your paragraph
- 3rd way
- Address the opposition in paragraph 1 then make your points in 2 + 3
- historical/general examples are fine, but material from sources should drive the argument
- Have a T chart going of ideas that are for and against the topic
- Bring old fashioned watch to keep an idea on the clock
- Could structure
- Identify Problem
- Explain Fallout
- Give solution