A Visit from the Warriors
Walt: make a recount more descriptive
When people read this story they should feel interested and excited.
Vocab to help my recount:
Tohu Harris, Nate, Nutrition, Hydration, Trivia, Sleep, Healthy Eating, Prizes, Warriors, Tiki, Quiz, Games, David, Oxygen, |
Plan of my paragraph topics
1. Introduction 3 sentences | Orientates and hooks Makes the reader want to keep reading |
2. Body Paragraph 1 3-4 sentences | Sleep - what was this part of the presentation about? Describe this using descriptive words. |
3. Body Paragraph 2 3-4 sentences | Hydration - what was this part of the presentation about? Describe this using descriptive words. |
4. Body Paragraph 3 3-4 sentences | Nutrition - what was this part of the presentation about? Describe this using descriptive words. |
5. Conclusion 2-3 sentences | How did I feel about this? What did I learn? |
Start Writing here:
Yesterday, on monday the 13th of August in the afternoon we had an assembly. Room 8 walked to the hall quickly to see what it was. Until i saw the warriors van room 8 walked inside the hall to sit down, so we had to shuffle up because Mr goodwin said, as i saw the warriors van I got bored
And sat like and like i never liked the warriors.
And then i got tired until the game quiz was on and waited for a while until it was all finish but then wyvern got picked to do a eating contest him and bobby john when they started they were munching it hard wyvern drank the water first then he could eat the weet bix, and it was an weet bix challenge.
And wyvern was nearly finished and bobby john was freaked out because he was nearly finished and the crowd was cheering for them then wyvern he took one last bite then he finished it but he had to drink all of his water as he finished the water he put his hand up like a champion. Then we went back to class.
THE END.