-Introductions and weekly overview

-Ice Breaker game

-Logos, Pathos, Ethos and Weekly Objectives

-Writing sample: “Writing the Winning Essay” Essay #1

-Brainstorming on the 3 possible topics: what is expected

-TOPICS: Family, Obstacles, Community Service

-Chapter 6, Introductions handout

-Keep working on Winning Essay, stay with topics

-Look over feedback and discuss details/imagery

-Reflection Writing—Essay #1

-Show VS Tell Discussion

-Beginning, Middle, and End

-The “Winning Essay”—Essay #1

-Resource talk and feedback

-Language and wording/detail

-Technical/academic VS. natural/organic

-Edit work/grammar

-Look over sample essay

-Chapter 6, Conclusions handout

-Going over your draft--finish

-Power Verbs and wording—use dictionary and thesaurus

-Final draft and outcome/samples

-Style and voice—objectives

-Finish draft and tools for continuation (500 words)

Oregon Migrant Leadership Students,


I would like to start by saying, “Welcome” to the OMLI and to the OSU Campus. I’m very excited that you are here and there is a lot we are going to cover this week. However, each one of you has the capacity to do this—tell a story, write it down, and fine-tune. You’ll all be doing the following: reflect, brainstorm, write, and tell stories. In addition, you will all be completing at least one writing sample that you can then use, reshape, or refer to when it comes time to write an essay in the future. The final draft, which will be completed by the end of Thursday’s workshop, will be 500 words in length.

On top of this, you will all be expected to participate, listen to instruction and utilize the time given to work on a single, focused draft. The hope is that a 500-word essay can be completed by the end of Thursday, July 27th. You’ll be given tips on writing and how to start the drafting process, and know what is expected from you in each of your writing tasks this week. Keep all this information as it will help you in the future, whether it is for professional or academic reasons and you’ll be told of additional resources that are available on the OMLI Website.

-The objectives for the weeks are as follows:




Practice writing. Only with time and practice, along with feedback, will your writing improve and you’ll be able to find your style and voice. By doing so, you will be able to find more confidence, both in your ideas and in the way that you write. Confidence will make your writing stronger and standout, as well as giving your essay credibility and be a strong and successful essay.

  1. TRUST:

To make your writing stronger, feedback and editing will play a crucial role in creating strong, successful writing. Feedback from a friend or fellow student will be a good start, but finding a teacher, mentor, counselor, or adult to give you feedback, suggestions, and pointers will really assist your writing—this will make you more confident, even if at the beginning, you are embarrassed or reluctant to share your writing. In this week’s workshops, you can feel free to write what you know and write what you are comfortable sharing—don’t feel bad if you’d like a specific OMLI staff or mentor to read something and no one else—we are here to support you!


Don’t be afraid to ask questions, especially if they are in pursuit of an answer that will benefit you. For all you know, others in your group or class have a similar concern or question, but are too afraid to ask. Never hesitate to ask a question about the workshop or about writing—ask away! No matter how big or small a question may seem, we’ll give you the answer or we’ll search and find it for you. So, if it affects you, find what you need for your success!


You all have access to a lot of resources—so find them! Use them! These can also be sample essays, sample cover letters and resumes, YouTube videos, or Google (specifically Google Scholar). You can get access to books or articles at your local library or even online. People are resources too, and they can give you the necessary information when it comes to not only writing, but also to other helpful information that will assist you on your academic path. A college or business’ website is full of information and key words you can use when applying, and this can give you a bit of an advantage.


How many of you wait until the last minute to do an assignment? Do you do it a week before or the night before? Some may excel under pressure and can write a good paper the day before. As you’ll find out, this is something that you should practice on not doing anymore. When it comes to applying for a scholarship or application, many of these have deadlines. When asking someone like a teacher or mentor for feedback on an essay, you’ll find that giving them only two days isn’t fair, let alone doable. You’ll need time to go over their notes, and you’ll need time to finalize. By rushing something so crucial, you might find that you made a mistake and this could end up hurting your chances.


Rhetoric means something that is said or written to inform, persuade, or argue for a position—it is communicating a message. Within your writing, you’ll be using “parts” of rhetorical appeal to persuade your audience that you are the best candidate. Using logos and pathos, you’ll be making your case and adding support. With good writing, correct format, thought-out and logical organization, your paper will have built-in credibility and thus, you’ll finally have the last and third part of rhetoric and that’s ethos.

Logos appeals to a reader’s sense of reason and logic (informative). Are you supporting what you say with examples or experiences, or even with a quote or statistic? Does what you say connect and transition well in a logical manner? Is it clear and can we follow your ideas and thought process? Are you informing us correctly and showing us why this information matters?

Pathos uses emotion to support an argument. Appealing to an audience’s emotions is often a very powerful way to support an argument or make your case, which is “I am the best candidate.” Using detail, sensory, and imagery; it can help to evoke emotion and allow the reader to connect with your writing on a human level. They will get to see you as more than just another applicant, but as a person. In the end, you want the audience to feel something in your writing and to connect, making your writing standout, which happens when you balance between logos and pathos—having some academic or “textbook-style” writing, along with your own natural writing that will have some emotion and humanity.

Ethos has to do with how credible a writer is, and by extension, how credible their argument is. This credibility can come from expertise, such as a study from a doctor or a person with years of credentials. When looking at writing in general, you look at the writer and what they are trying to say. But in this type of writing, the audience knows that you are a student and applying for something. In some cases, ethos can come from good writing, but also from the examples you use, experiences you’ve had (authenticity), and at times, using additional sources, or information can help with this, or by doing research beforehand.

They are connected, all three. Logos will often improve an argument’s ethos, sometimes logos will assist in creating pathos. It’s normal for them to overlap and a good argument doesn’t always need all three rhetorical elements in equal amounts, it depends on the task. Understanding rhetoric will help you have better control of writing and making a strong argument which is ethos—all helpful tools in writing these types of essays.

*Copyright 2009—the Linn Benton Community College Writing Center

Writing the Winning Essay

Essay #1

  1. Introduction

It must stand out, catching the attention of the reader. Use at least two of the five senses. It can be a description or an engaging scene; it can ask a question, state a fact or be a quote that has been emphasized by a parent, grandparent or relative, be very positive or it can be related to your obstacle. It must be unique and must stand out. NEVER start the essay with, “Hello, my name is…”

  1. Body of Essay

  1. Family:

Describe your family being very specific: ethnic background, country origins, number of brothers and sisters, parents educational background and occupation. Include any special circumstances such as: single parent home, illness, death, disability of a family member.

  1. Obstacle

Describe a challenging obstacle that you or family has endured. What character qualities have you learned, are you presently learning, and/or do you need to learn from your obstacle?

  1. Community Service

Choose two or three community service activities to describe. This is not just a list. What was your commitment? What was your leadership role? Relate any personal experience or story. How did you make a difference?

  1. Conclusion

Why do you need a scholarship? Describe in detail any special circumstances. The last sentence should contain a clincher, a strong statement showing determination and strength.

*Copyright 2008—June McBride

Brainstorming Session

Essay #1

  1. Introduction

  1. Body



                Community Service:

  1. Conclusion

Reflection and Writing

Alternative Essay

Finish one of these sentences down below to find a way to reflect on the past or think about the future. Discuss personal themes of growth, struggle, goal-seeking, family, culture, experiences, positive, negative: all that has made you, you. All the following bullet points discuss more complicated ideas, but as for the path you take after picking one theme, that is all up to you. There is no wrong answer. But it does help to write what you know and reflect on the familiar. The editing process will happen in the later steps. Start with bullet-points or key words, phrases or write a few sentences…




Administered                Developed                Formulated                Prepared                Revised

Anticipated                Devised                        Identified                Prioritized                Strategize

Commissioned                Evaluated                Observed                Researched                Studied

Determined                Forecasted                Planned                Reserved                Tailored


Acquired                Cataloged                Designated                Logged                        Routed

Activated                Centralized                Designed                Mapped out                Scheduled

Adjusted                Charted                        Dispatched                Neatened                Selected

Allocated                Classified                Established                Obtained                Secured

Altered                        Collected                Facilitated                Ordered                Simplified

Appointed                Committed                Housed                        Organized                Sought

Arranged                Confirmed                Implemented                Procured                Straightened

Assembled                Contracted                Incorporated                Programmed                Suggested

Assessed                Coordinated                Instituted                Recruited                Tracked

Assigned                Customized                Issued                        Rectified        

Authorized                Delegated                Linked                        Retrieved


Acted                        Displayed                Input                        Processed                Sold

Administered                Distributed                Installed                Produced                Stocked

Carried out                Entered                        Labored                Proofed                        Transacted

Collected                Exercised                Merchandised                Prospected

Completed                Forwarded                Operated                Proved

Conducted                Handled                Performed                Shipped


Accelerated                Elected                        Guided                        Mentored                Spearheaded

Assumed                Employed                Hired                        Motivated                Stimulated

Caused                        Empowered                Influenced                Originated                Strengthened

Chaired                        Encouraged                Initiated                Pioneered                Supervised

Changed                Enlisted                        Inspired                Promoted                Trained

Conducted                Envisioned                Involved                Raised                        Transformed

Directed                Fostered                Led                        Recognized                 Visualized

Disproved                Founded                Managed                Set goals


Alleviated                Conceptualized                Detected                Found                        Solved

Analyzed                Created                        Diagnosed                Investigated                Synthesized

Brainstormed                Engineered                Recommended                Revitalized                Theorized

Collaborated                Decided                Foresaw                Remedied                Revived

Conceived                Deciphered                Formulated                Remodeled                Satisfied


Accomplished                Constructed                Ensured                Minimized                Reduced

Achieved                Contributed                Excelled                Heightened                Rejuvenated

Added                        Delivered                Expanded                Improved                Obtained

Advanced                Demonstrated                Expedited                Increased                Restored

Attained                Diminished                Extended                Innovated                Targeted

Augmented                Earned                        Finalized                Integrated                Overcame

Boosted                Fulfilled                        Introduced                Prevailed                Orchestrated

Built                        Eliminated                Gained                        Invented                Produced

Combined                Enlarged                Generated                Joined                        Qualified

Completed                Enjoyed                        Grew                        Launched                Realized

Consolidated                Enlisted                        Guaranteed                Lightened                Received


Acted                Composed                Elicited                Justified        Rendered        Summarized

Adapted        Consented                Explained        Lectured        Reported        Supplemented

Admitted        Concluded                Extracted        Marketed        Represented        Supported

Addressed        Convinced                Mediated        Revealed        Fabricated        Surveyed

Allowed        Consulted                Fashioned        Moderated        Sanctioned        Synthesized

Amended        Corresponded                Greeted        Negotiated        Settled                Systematized

Arbitrated        Critiqued                Highlighted        Perceived        Shaped                Tested

Argued                Dedicated                Illustrated        Persuaded        Smoothed        Taught

Ascertained        Defined                        Improvised        Presented        Specified        Translated

Attested        Deliberated                Indicated        Publicized        Spoke                Transmitted

Briefed                Demonstrated                Inferred        Queried        Sold                Verified

Clarified        Drafted                        Informed        Questioned        Solicited        Welcomed

Cleared up        Dramatized                Instructed        Referred        Submitted        Wrote

Closed                Edited                        Interpreted        Reinforced        Substantiated

Communicated                                 Educated        Interviewed        Related                Suggested


Aided                        Bolstered                Eased                Familiarized        Prescribed        Returned

Accommodated                Coached                Elevated        Helped                Provided

Advised        Enabled                Interceded                Protected        Served                Saved

Alleviated                Cooperated                Enhanced        Modeled        Relieved        Tutored

Assisted                Counseled                Endorsed        Mobilized        Rehabilitated        Sustained

Assured                        Dealt                        Enriched        Polished        Rescued        Validated        

*Copyright Oregon State University Writing Center