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Mud Kitchen Project! 

On Thursday we all had to think very carefully of a project and gather up ALL & i mean ALL of the equipment we needed our class looked like an old lady's basement that had never been visited over the years i mean decades!.Me , Maddi , Tessa , Alison , Verity , Azrael & Morgan came up with the idea to make a gnarly Mud kitchen.When the day finally came ...we all were scattered around the place in excitement when the bell rang we hurriedly ran to the mat like a pack of stones and sat as still as possible.It was a bummer because it was after morning tea and we had cybersmart but i absolutely loved the lesson.Alison & Verity actually were making something different and a gnarly idea that they came up with they had enough courage piled up and made a little table basically like a storage thing! We spent hours and hours painting i even got paint in my hair like! What!! It wasn't fun because i wanted to paint the counter and we had to paint the back first witch was so hard while Verity and Alison we painting all the way over there on the table i think they heard us panting in tiredness it was hilariously crack up.The next day we were obviously covered in paint still looking like weird as ghost human beings just roaming around the school looking like we are covered in bed sheets.Then it was finally time for lunch, After that we FINALLY FINALLY got to paint the counter top! I even got paint in my hair! It looks like i was slowly turning like an old lady roaming around painting.It was so much fun, But not the part where we had to wash it all the paint of….it was easy to take out of my hair but on my legs nooo it was so hard i had to scrub it off so hard I looked like an old person             trying screech of a burn stain from a steaming pan.The next day we took photos with it, But sadly I wasn't there because I was late but I didn't mind you can see the picture at the end of the story. You can see that we added pots and pans and different little accessories to it like Pizza plates,Pan,cups or mugs,bottles of some sort and that was the day we were hurriedly rushing like a pack of hyenas WAIT! I forgot the picture here!By Manvi :)

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