Wednesday 10th February 2016.

On sunday we went for a barbecue with my mum and dad and my family. my dad cooked the barbecue.

Element

Why did you give the score?

Ideas

2

I didn’t have that many ideas.

Structure and Language

2

I can tell my readers when my story happened.

Organisation

3

My story makes sense.

Sentences

2

I can write sentences that makes sense.

Vocabulary

2

I used everyday words.

Punctuation

2

I am using some fullstops.

Spelling

3

I can spell some words correctly.

Total

16

1a

List something that you think you did well in this text.

I wrote sentences that made sense.

What do you need to work on to improve your writing?

I need to use interesting words. I need to use full stops and capital letters correctly.