Friday 16th June 2017

We are learning to write a recount about the fun run

Why: For our first blog post

Success Criteria

What I need to do:

How did I go?

Buddy Check. How did the go?

I include all my ideas from my plan

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A clear introduction including when and where it was.

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Sentence starters (First, Next, Then, Suddenly, Finally)

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A personal comment - How you were feeling

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At Least three things you did

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Start writing here….

On Friday the 9th of June Room 6 and Room 5 went to the Adidas Fun Run.

First, we had to sit on the long old slimy fence and Mr Margetts told us where to go so that we know where to run.Some of them passed it to me and I had to pass it back. Miss Bound Was screaming “go Abbas!!!”

Next, Alipate passed me and I Got tireder and tireder. I ran past Takahe and they were cheering for me. Suddenly I fell down but I got back up and I didn't give up. I was breathing heavily. My dad said “go Abbas” and I was happy so I ran as fast as a buggati car.

Suddenly, my dad said “it is nearly finished.” My eyes were dripping and my face was as red as blood.

Finally it was finished. I was so proud of myself and my dad and Miss Bound were proud of me too. I sat down and I cheered with my dad for Paula.