- Finish UnSpun: Finding Facts in a World of Misinformation
- Introduction to stylistic analysis. Questions to ask of any passage when discussing a writer's style
- Essay:
compare and contrast the styles of two quotes from six authors
provided: John Steinbeck, James Baldwin, George Bernard Shaw, Francis
Bacon, Dylan Thomas, and Thomas Carlyle.
week 5 (9/21)
- FactCheckEd Listerine documents analysis
- Youth Voices registration and first post with web snippets using Flock browser
- Introduction to Google Reader for researching current events and issues in contemporary society
- Write a book review of Unspun
week 6 (9/28) (Monday was a diocesan inservice, no classes, and Tues-Thurs I attended Google Teacher Academy)
- Finish Frames of Mind, Chapter 3: Analysis. Annie Dillard and E.O. Wilson essay.
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Introduction to AP objective exam. Sample passage: "But to tell you my story"... (The Angel)
week 7 (9/29)
- students respond to Petraeus documents-based essay
- FactCheckEd lesson on logical fallacies
- write drafts for Letters to the Next President project sponsored by the National Writing Project and Google
- Read "Politics and the English Language" by George Orwell
- Begin 1984
- Bring examples of college essay prompts
- Grammar minilesson the use of the semicolon (review sentence structure: simple, compound, complex, compound-complex)
- Parallel structure (and semicolon use) in Gettysburg address and JFK's Inaugural Speech
- Return UnSpun book review; students underline each paragraph's topic sentence, then the essay's thesis statement. Reflect on efficacy.
week 8
week 9
-
Discuss 1984
- Lecture and discussion: George Orwell's life and legacy
week 10
-
Discuss 1984
- end of quarter writing reflection writers notebook and blogs
week 11
- intro to student contest wiki
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Read/write/discuss Orwell's "Shooting an Elephant"
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watch excerpts of Animal Farm
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Essay: compare 1984 & Animal Farm
week 12
- Search for a writing contest to enter
- Book Groups form after choosing from the utopian/distopian reading lists. Here's a link to the description
- Read Orwell's "Politics and the English Language"
- Introduction to synthesis: "Find examples from contemporary society and from your reading to illustrate whether Orwell is still relevant to us."
week 13
- Contest entry draft due
- Watch Frontline's "The Persuaders"
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Essay: Reflect on the relevance of "The Persuaders" regarding contemporary society.
- I'll be out of town this week attending meetings and giving a
couple of presentations in New York City. Here are links to my
presentations:
week 14
- Contest entry final draft due
- letter of Thanksgiving
week 15
- take online test for National Vocabulary Championship
- Begin Frames of Mind, Chapter 3: Analysis
- Introduction to AP objective question about documentation
- Introduction to AP synthesis essay
- Write free-response essay for question #1, 2007. Students grade sample essays and then a partner's essay from the other section. Then they grade their own essay. Teacher compares his score with the ones they received from their partner and the one they gave themself.
week 16
- Book presentations on Distopian novels all week
- Spelling rules and Spelling Demons
week 17
- Finish Frames of Mind, Chapter 3: Analysis
- AP objective sample passages: "Once a Day" (Twain) and "the Roarer, Whisperer, Moderation" (Samuel Johnson)
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Essay: various essays in Chapter 3 of Frames of Mind
- Writers notebook check
week 18
- Bertrand Russell sequence
- Read and Discuss Martin Luther King's, "Letter from a Birmingham Jail"
- Introduction to Plagiarism, part one: Using Allowable images in your Digital Writing. How to use the Creative Commons feature on Flickr
- Plagiarism, part two: Telling the Truth. Students research recent journalism scandals. Here's a link to the assignment.
- Students form groups who choose a book to read from the Classics list ("The 100 Most-Often-Recommended Works" from Reading Lists for the College Bound, Arco)
- read/write/discuss Swift's "A Modest Proposal"
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Essay: Discuss the profile techniques the film makers used when interviewing for the documentary, Standing in the Shadows of Motown.
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Students complete "Reading a Draft Critically" activities. Here's a link to more information about the assignment
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Essay: Compare-contrast Charles Dickens and Jane Austen's two passages proposing marriage
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Essay: find a quote in the initial chapters of your Classic. Write an essay of reflection about it. Here's a link to the assignment description.
week 19
- semester exam week - no classes
week 20 – Semester Two begins
- Review Semester Exam
- introduction to synthesis essay
- Discuss Dead Man Walking
- essay: Dead Man Walking
week 21
- Sundance movie
- Begin Frames of Mind, Chapter 4: Description
- students begin reading Writing with Style, chapters 1 & 2
- essay: Benny Paret by Norman Mailer & discussion
week 22
- intro to Shakespeare's language, Randall Robinson
- intro to Shakespeare's life
- Begin Henry IV, Part 1, Act I
- Read Writing with Style, chapters 3-5 (Beginnings, Middles, Closers)
- Introduction to online research: search strategies, Google tools (Alerts, Reader, Notebook)
- Poetry Out Loud, class level presentations
week 23
- Finish reading Writing with Style
- essay: All Henry IV essays that will be assigned in the next few weeks ask you to make this classic relevant. "Choose a quote that resonates with you from the most recent reading.
Write the quote at the top of a page in your writer’s notebook. Then
write a 300-word essay making a connection between the quote and
something you’ve experienced, observed, or read." This essay should be on a quote from Act II.
week 24
- essay: Using Trimble's advice and methods, write an original academic essay about Henry IV, Part I – one that is clearly written in your own voice. (Discussion of personal style in writing.)
- Henry IV essays: "Choose
a quote that resonates with you from the most recent reading.
Write the quote at the top of a page in your writer’s notebook. Then
write a 300-word essay making a connection between the quote and
something you’ve experienced, observed, or read." This essay should be on a quote from Act III.
week 25
- Begin Poetry Out Loud sequence. Write about 8 poems that you find on the Poetry Out Loud web site. Identify the one that you will memorize, and write 200-300 words about why that poem is significant to you.
- Henry IV essay: "Choose
a quote that resonates with you from the most recent reading.
Write the quote at the top of a page in your writer’s notebook. Then
write a 300-word essay making a connection between the quote and
something you’ve experienced, observed, or read." This essay should be on a quote from Act IV.
week 26
- Begin author wiki work. Choose someone from the AP list of suggested writers, and write a brief summary of that person and their work on the class AP author wiki page.
- Class time to work on Poetry Out Loud presentations.
- Poetry Out Loud recitations in class.
- Students bring to class examples of online essays already written about Henry IV (e.g. from echeat.com). Discussion of plagiarism.
Students analyze and grade essays found online using the AP scale AND
rubric #2 (see part III of this document, "Sample Rubrics").
- Reflective writing about writer's notebook. Find evidence that you're an original thinker and evidence that you're an improving writer.
- Henry IV essay: "Choose
a quote that resonates with you from the most recent reading.
Write the quote at the top of a page in your writer’s notebook. Then
write a 300-word essay making a connection between the quote and
something you’ve experienced, observed, or read." This essay should be on a quote from Act V.
week 27
- Poetry Out Loud school-wide recitations
- Henry IV synthesis essay: "Combine two or more of the ideas from your previous notebook entries
into one coherent essay. Make sure you cite two quotes and make
connections to two of the following: your own experience, something
you’ve observed, or something you’ve read."
week 28
- Begin reading Desert Solitaire
week 29
- write museum synthesis essay, from 2007 Form B
- Discuss Abbey's purpose and point of view in author's introduction, Desert Solitaire.
week 30
- Hand back museum synthesis essay
- evaluate 08-09 applicant essays on the AP rubric (Prospective students wrote application essays for the same museum synthesis essay)
- Frames of Mind, Chapter 4: Description
- Virginia Woolf excerpts
- essay: Explain the purpose of Abbey's description in Desert Solitaire: "Find any example of description from what you've read so far in Desert Solitaire. Briefly describe the passage, and then explain Abbey’s purpose for writing this description."
week 31
- Frames of Mind, Chapter 6: Illustration
- essay: Identify where Abbey uses illustration/exemplification in “Polemic: Industrial Tourism and the National Parks” in Desert Solitaire. Is that his most effective rhetorical strategy?
- Graduation Gift introduction. Seniors last writing project is to
create a compelling multigenre memoir for a significant person in their
life and package it as a graduation gift.
week 32
- Graduation Gift introduction. Seniors last writing project is to create a compelling multi-genre memoir for a significant person in their life and package it as a graduation gift.
- Early childhood writing (written entirely with one syllable words)
- Presentations of AP author wiki project
- Begin "This I Believe" sequence (based on the NPR series)
week 33
- Graduation gift workshop of writing
- Later childhood writing & workshop
- Adolescent writing & workshop
- Individual conferences with teacher
- Peer response circles
week 34
- Graduation gift drafts due
- AP exam final review
week 35
- AP English Language exam
- Students last week of classes
- Presentation of completed graduation gifts
- audio recordings of last writing assignment
week 36
week 37
- AP English Language an Composition Exam, May 14, 2008
week 38
III. Sample RubricsRubric #1: Adapted 9-point scale rubric for AP English classes at Judge Memorial
AP English Scoring Rubric
Content counts much more than grammar, word choice, or spelling; however, seldom do essays get scores of nine with as few as three or four errors. Mediocre papers fail to identify and analyze subtleties of meaning. Quality papers recognize and respond to the emotional nuances of the topic.
Scores of 9-8 (A, A-)
• These are superior essays.
• They have a clear statement of position, thoughtful support, convincing examples, and stylistic maturity (sentence structure, diction, organization).
• Although there may be a few grammar or spelling errors, the author demonstrates a superior control of language.
Scores of 7-6 (B-, B, B+)
• These are excellent essays.
• However, they have a thesis which lacks the specific and convincing proof of the superior essays.
• The author’s writing style is less mature, and thus has occasional lapses of diction, tone, syntax, or organization.
• Although there may be errors of grammar and spelling, the author demonstrates an adequate control of language.
Scores of 5-4 (C-, C, C+)
• These are mediocre, but adequate, essays.
• The thesis may not be quite clear, the argument not as well-developed, and the organization not especially effective.
• There are some grammar and spelling errors.
These essays will receive a score no higher than 4 if they show any one of the following:
a) oversimplification or overgeneralization of the issues
b) write only in general terms, ignoring fine distractions
c) fail to discuss the issue completely or satisfactorily
d) mismanage the evidence
e) contain insufficient details
f) fail to establish the importance of the writer
g) treat only one aspect of a two-sided issue
h) cite examples but fail to consider the consequences
i) cite stylistic techniques but fail to explain the impact
j) characterize the passage without analyzing the language
Scores of 3-2 (D)
• These are weak essays.
• They lack clear organization and adequate support, the writing style is simplistic, and there are frequent grammar and spelling errors.
Score of 1 (F)
• These are poor essays. Although they may mention the question, they lack clarity, have little or no evidence, and contain consistent grammar and spelling errors. They are badly written, unacceptably brief, or off-topic.
Pay special attention to circled items.
• spell check
• proof read, watch for incorrect usage-there/their/they’re, to/two/too
• give your essay a good title
• put your full name, date class and section number on your essay
• use better examples
• create a better thesis statement
• signpost your arguments using effective topic sentences
• use better verbs
• use more concrete details
• choose words that are lively, concrete, and vivid
• check your sentences to make sure they make sense
• edit your sentences to make them more economical
• create an effective conclusion
• try a different strategy for organization
• try using figurative language or a metaphor as part of your essay
• restrict your focus
• create a critical thesis
• avoid summary
• find better ways to incorporate evidence
• read your evidence more carefully
Rubric #2Critical Analysis Essay Scoring RubricI have marked the main areas that need improvement. In general a “4” is an “A,” a “3” is a “B,” and so on.
FOCUS
4 - Clear, sharp, distinct controlling POINT and awareness of task.
Writer is in control and orchestrates development of the topic in
an enlightening way. TOPIC + ATTITUDE = THESIS.
3 - Apparent point. The focus is adequate. Insights may be
superficial and the control is sporadic but present. Writer is
beginning to define the topic.
2 - There is evidence of a topic but NO POINT. No meaningful
definition of topic. Absence of a thesis statement or topic
sentence.
1 - Minimal evidence of topic; topic is difficult to discern.
CONTENT
4 - STRONG development (shows insight telling details give
important information). Main ideas stand out. The writer makes
connections that reflect his/her thinking.
3 - SUFFICIENT and adequate development. Writer may have
difficulty going from general to specific. The writer superficially
considers ideas. Readers can second-guess the main points;
ideas tend toward the mundane.
2 - INADEQUATE, limited development (lists, repetition, or
sequences). Information limited or unclear; details are cliché.
Topic is not defined in a meaningful way (see Focus above)
1 - Relevant content is absent or confused.
ORGANIZATION
4 - COMPELLING order and structure. The organization enhances,
showcases the central idea (focus). The organization moves the
reader along; details fit. An introduction invites the reader in;
there is a satisfying conclusion . Smooth transitions are present
the reader may not even be conscious of them (subtlety).
3 - Reader can follow what’s being said, but the overall
organization may sometimes be INEFFECTIVE or OBVIOUS.
Introduction and conclusion are present; paper moves along at
a good pace. Transitions may seem easily anticipated (for
example, first, second,). Still, the organization does not get in
the way of the main point.
2 - HAPHAZARD organization The paper may get bogged down in
trivia or speed along haphazardly. Placement of details leaves
the reader confused or impatient.
1 - No clearly identifiable introduction or conclusion. Connections
between ideas are fuzzy; details seem to just fill in space.
Pacing is awkward. Lack of organization obscures or distorts
the main point or purpose.
STYLE
4 - Writer speaks to the reader in a way that is individual,
expressive and engaging. Words are specific; imagery is
strong; powerful words give the piece energy; vocabulary is
striking but not overdone. Fresh, original expression, honest
writing. The reader senses the person behind the words.
3 - The writer seems sincere but not fully involved in the topic;
pleasant, acceptable, but not compelling. The language may be
quite ordinary, but it does convey a message. The overall
meaning is clear but some words may lack precision. However
the paper MAY have some fine moments. Use of colorful
language may seem overdone to impress the reader rather
than to convey a message. Some clichés and redundancies
may be present.
2 - Images lack details and often depend on the readers
knowledge to fill in. The writing tends to hide rather than reveal
the reader. The writer communicates in a routine manner. Flat
language robs the text of power.
1 - The writer struggles with a limited vocabulary, using vague
language. Only the most general of message comes through.
The writer seems wholly indifferent, uninvolved. The writing is
flat, lifeless. There is no sense of a writer behind the words.
CONVENTIONS
4 - The writer demonstrates a good grasp of grammar,
capitalization, punctuation, spelling, usage, and paragraphing.
Errors are so few and so minor that the reader can skim right
over them. Spelling is generally correct even on the more
difficult words. Grammar and usage contribute to clarity and
style. Punctuation is smooth and guides the reader through the
text. The writer may manipulate conventions, particularly
grammar for stylistic effects.
3 - Errors in writing conventions are not overwhelming. Terminal
punctuation is correct but internal punctuation may be incorrect
or missing. Spelling is correct on common words. Problems in
usage are not severe enough to distract the reader.
2 - Errors begin to impair readability. They tend to be distracting.
Paragraphing is inconsistent. Spelling is generally correct but
sometimes phonetic even in common words. Text may be too
short to reflect real mastery of conventions. Moderate editing is
required to polish the text.
1 - Numerous errors in usage, sentence structure, etc., repeatedly
distract the reader and make the text difficult to read. The reader
must reread for meaning. Punctuation is omitted, haphazard, or
incorrect. Spelling errors are frequent even on common words.
Paragraphing is irregular or absent altogether.
IV.
AP English Language Curricular Evidence1. The course teaches and requires students to write in several forms
(e.g., narrative, expository, analytical, and argumentative essays)
about a variety of subjects (e.g., public policies, popular culture,
personal experiences).
Students write in several forms. Some of the forms come from the sequences in our text, Concise Guide to Writing
like autobiography, evaluation, reflection, problem-solution, etc.
Students in this class also write varying lengths of research papers,
creative writing and multigenre pieces.
Students write about a variety of subjects. Blog posts on youthvoices.net tend to be more about popular culture, the entries in
the writer's notebooks tend toward the more personal, and students are
also required to try to publish all their final drafts either in the
popular press or as entries to writing contests.2. The course requires students to write essays that proceed through
several stages or drafts, with revision aided by teacher and peers.
Here's
an example of a sequence where students formed response groups using
Google Documents, making at least two other classmates "collaborators"
of their document. The teacher is also a collaborator on all drafts
written using Google Docs, and the teacher responds to students' drafts
online. Below is a summary of the directions from the "Writing
Reflection" chapter of Concise Guide to Writing.
These directions were placed directly in the students' Google Docs
draft by the teacher after the students completed the invention
activities. Then the teacher commented on the drafts after one week.
Critical Reading Guide and Revising
Note to responders. Write your comments in a different color than the writers, and a different color than these directions.
Step One. In
class on Tuesday, 2/20, we did the "If you are the Writer" activity
where you wrote about your essay's intended audience, your purpose, and
a problem in the draft that you needed help solving. Then your partner
completed #1, "Read for a First Impression."
Step Two.By
Friday, 2/23, complete the activities in the Critical Reading Guide on
pages 152-154. Have your partner respond to each of these prompts:
- Assess whether the concept is clearly explained and focused
- Consider whether the content is appropriate for the intended readers
- Evaluate the organization (beginning, transitions, ending)
- Assess the clarity of definitions
- Evaluate the use of sources
- Evaluate the effectiveness of visuals
- Give the writer your final thoughts
Step Three. For Tuesday, 2/26, complete your revision using the activities on pages 154-159.
3. The course requires students to write in informal contexts (e.g.,
imitation exercises, journal keeping, collaborative writing, and
in-class responses) designed to help them become increasingly aware of
themselves as writers and of the techniques employed by the writers
they read.
The
basis for informal writing comes from Notebook Know-How, by Aimee
Buckner. Imitation exercises take place throughout the year based on
the author being studied. Students in this class write every day, most
often using their writers' notebooks. However, some of the daily
writing takes place on our blogging space at youthvoices.net.4. The course requires expository, analytical, and argumentative writing
assignments that are based on readings representing a wide variety of
prose styles and genres.
Upon completion of 1984 by George Orwell, students are given the following assignment:
Choose
one of the following books to read. Compare and contrast that author's
view of the future with that of Orwell's. Using your critical
understanding of contemporary society, in your opinion which author's viewpoint is more relevant today?
Utopian works
Utopia, Sir Thomas More
The Republic, Plato
Distopian novels
Fahrenheit 451, Ray Bradbury
The Time Machine, H.G. Wells
Lord of the Flies, William Golding
Brave New World, Aldous Huxley
The Handmaid’s Tale, Margaret Atwood
Oryx and Crake, Margaret Atwood
A Clockwork Orange, Anthony Burgess
5. The course requires nonfiction readings (e.g., essays, journalism,
political writing, science writing, nature writing,
autobiographies/biographies, diaries, history, criticism) that are
selected to give students opportunities to identify and explain an
author's use of rhetorical strategies and techniques. If fiction and
poetry are also assigned, their main purpose should be to help students
understand how various effects are achieved by writers' linguistic and
rhetorical choices.
Write an essay in which you analyze
the rhetorical strategies Prejean uses to explain her views of the
death penalty in Dead Man Walking. Discuss the effectiveness of
her arguments. (After essays are written and assessed using the AP rubric, the class discusses the
book. The teacher and students identify these rhetorical techniques.)
- Contrast (examples can be found on pages 31, 128, 132, 138),
- The writer's own Ambivalence (pp. 21, 145, 229),
- Concession (119, 134-136) and counter concession (p.129),
- Saving the strongest argument for last (pp. 8&9, 130, 154&155, 167)
- Offering solutions (p. 233)
- Syntax reflects attitude (pp. 27, 41)
- Citing authority (Camus on pp. 21 & 22, 89 and frequent references to the Bible)
Another example:
In the chapter titled, "Industrial Tourism" in Desert Solitaire, Edward Abbey suggests ways the Park Service can be improved. How effective is his argumentation?
6. The course teaches students to analyze how graphics and visual images
both relate to written texts and serve as alternative forms of text
themselves.
Students in Chris Sloan's AP English Language and Composition
collaborate with students around the country in a social networking web
site, http://youthvoices.net At least once a week the writers
notebook for this class is written as a blog entry in Youth Voices.
The purpose of this work is to introduce students to the concept of
educational blogging. Here's one example of the process students were
taken through to produce a blog entry using images:
1. Write for 15 minutes on the following: What's going on in my community or the world that concerns me?
2.
Now write a focused sentence. A perfectly written, opinionated
sentence that re-states your entire freewrite. Freewrite again for 10
minutes starting with your focused sentence.
3. Insert a
Creative Commons image or one of your own.
4. Freewrite for a third time, this time with the image in mind.
How does the image represent what you are trying to get across in your post?5. Using Google Reader, add two quotations from other blogs or news items that you have read about this topic.
6. Freewrite a final time with these quotations in mind.
How does each quote add to the message in your post?7. Now copy and paste this final writing into a blog post for today.
7. The course teaches research skills, and in particular, the ability to
evaluate, use, and cite primary and secondary sources. The course
assigns projects such as the researched argument paper, which goes
beyond the parameters of a traditional research paper by asking
students to present an argument of their own that includes the analysis
and synthesis of ideas from an array of sources.
AND
8. The course teaches students how to cite sources using a recognized editorial style (e.g., Modern Language Association,
The Chicago Manual of Style, etc.).
Research Paper. The resources used to introduce the research paper is based on the SIRS Researcher Pro vs. Con sequence.
However other sources are used, including discussions about using
online sources (like news aggregators like Google Reader). Teacher
also provides definition and examples of plagiarism.
Phase 1. Choose a topic that:
- You find personally interesting and have questions about
- You can adequately address in the amount of time you are given to complete your teacher’s assignment.
Phase 2. Choose a focus
- Read carefully at least three articles that discuss the
issues, solutions, problems, questions, or viewpoints that interest you
the most.
- Create or Print a bibliography of these three articles by using the SIRS "Tagged List" feature.
Phase 3. State a thesis, state three supporting ideas and at least one piece of evidence for each idea
Phase 4: SELECT and READ other documents associated with your topic.
CHOOSE documents that will
• Provide evidence such as facts and statistics, cases, legislation, quotes, or personal examples
• Contain expert opinion that supports your thesis or supporting ideas or opposes your thesis or supporting ideas
• Help you explore your questions about your topic’s issues, problems, controversies
Critically read and analyze sources. Source: Critical Reading strategies from Reading Critically, Writing Well.
Phase 5: Review the sources and re-evaluate thesis. Peer group discussions.
Phase 6: Writing and Citing. Consolidate all of your evidence, thesis, and supporting ideas into a first draft.
Make sure your draft contains the following:
• An introduction that states your thesis.
• A summary of the opposition’s opinion, along with your refutation of that opinion.
• At least one paragraph for each of your supporting ideas, with
relevant evidence and explanation of how the supporting idea supports
your thesis.
• A summary or direct quote from an author’s opinion
• Proper documentation 1) when quoting or paraphrasing someone
else’s opinion and 2) evidence. (Use the SIRS Researcher Tagged List
feature to assist in creating your works cited/references/bibliography.)
• A conclusion that summarizes the main points of your research
paper and states a recommendation, prediction, or solution to the
problem(s) raised in the paper.
Create bibliography using SIRS Researcher Tagged List feature.
Evaluation: Phase 6
Before submitting your paper, review and evaluate it. Ask yourself the following questions:
STAYING ON TASK: Have I referred to my thesis statement in each paragraph?
AVOIDING PLAGIARISM:
• When I have restated others’ ideas to support my thesis or
argument, have I summarized these ideas in my own words, not theirs?
• Have I given proper credit to my sources?
AVOIDING CARELESS ERROR: Has my paper been proofread? Have I used correct grammar and spelling?