Is it a real case that Hong Kong’s people (bad!) -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:05 PMEnglish standard is declining?Good question with which to start the essay -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:04 PM In recent year, many people started to discuss about the English standard in Hong Kong. Some research shows that Hong Kong people’s (good!) -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:05 PM English standard and English communication skills rank number ten in the continents do not require articles -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:06 PM Asia. This result alerted us to face this problem in serious. Below, I will discuss about why it has happened and the solutions what we can do or improve.Clear scope, though the grammar needs work -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:07 PM
You need a strong topic sentence; what exactly are you talking about in this paragraph? It appears to me that the answer is history, and culture; write a sentence to introduce these supporting details -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:09 PM Hong Kong is a colony of England for 99 years. Although she had a relationship with the England, it didn’t mean that she could have a better English standard. Cantonese is the master of the language in Hong Kong. Nearly 99% of people used Cantonese in their daily life, it seems that no one want to change it. Although HK is an international city in the world, it is hard to make people use English in their life. Therefore, as a result, even 90% of people in HK know how to communicate in English and how to make good use of their English, they will not practice it. People say “practice makes prefect”. In HK situation, what we had learnt will disappear automatically, since we hadn’t practiced it. Besides of this cause, HK education system is another cause of this issue. (this should be the topic sentence of the next paragraph) -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:08 PM
You need an article for THE government -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:12 PM HK government provide 9 year free education for all children. But, these 9 years free education system brings a lot of trouble to HK children and is one of the matters of this issue. In these recent years, HK government changed this system again and again. The government reform the system, the context and the main part is to differentiate different students into different level of schools. Government developed the Chinese and English schools, which in order to let who had a better English student to study in the English, and then the This is great! -Wootang01 9/29/08 2:33 PM rests are studied in the Chinese school. This is not an appropriate way to differentiate (try a different to-infinitive) -Wootang01 9/29/08 2:34 PM the ability of student. Since, most of the Chinese school students “believe” that they really are bad in English and no more confidence to use their English skills. What government did is only to strike at the students in using English.
However, even there are a lot of reasons which make English standard decline in HK; I believe that there should also be a lot of solutions to tackle this problem. Firstly, Government should not change the education system all the time and not to care what students need. She should set up the appropriate proposal for educationist and students to follow and improve the skills, especial the English skills. Apart from this, people need to find a way to help themselves. Watching more English programs, reading English newspaper to replace the Chinese’s one and building a confidence to talk with each other or even foreigner are some ways for them to apply. This is a good paragraph about education: you present the details about education problems; and suggest solutions. What about your first body paragraph; what do you suggest we do about the culture and history idea? -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:10 PM
English is the international language, everyone should familiar in it. Find a suitable and interested way for ourselves to improve the English standard is very important. Then, don’t wait anymore, just action!
I'm glad you spell-checked this essay! -Wootang01 9/19/08 4:06 PM